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Clockwork_Orange
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since 2007-03-23
Posts 620
Space Camp, IN

0 posted 2008-03-12 06:45 PM


curb stomp me,
make me eat my teeth;
dont try to hide it,
i know you want me to bleed.
and here we are,
words as red as our hearts
glowing with the anger,
thats just tearing us apart.

just forget slipping away;
its too late,i fell yesterday.
were both so gone,
theres not much more to take.
and if you were here,
id pass the bottle to you.
take a gulp, drink it down;
because when its done were through.

somewhere along the line,
we lost our way;
and just let our words
decide our fate.
i cant say im sorry,
you'd better take that bet.
but dont think im heartless.
i still regret.

these sad songs and lullabies,
make want to break down and cry.
i cant seem to dry my eyes.
i think that im bled dry.
your my influence,
from soul to pen.
and if you deny the same,
would be a sin.

so there you go,
revenge is yours.
you broke me down,
and now im on the floor.
i bit the bullet,
i swallowed my pride.
im tired of myself,
im tired of this fight.


© Copyright 2008 Bryan Lucas - All Rights Reserved
Clockwork_Orange
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since 2007-03-23
Posts 620
Space Camp, IN
1 posted 2008-03-12 06:52 PM


there you go.
Earl Robertson
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since 2008-01-21
Posts 753
BC, Canada
2 posted 2008-03-12 10:48 PM


This was very very well written!

"Be Strong and Always Remember what made you you." Earl

"Ooo!!! Ooo!! I know! I know! um...he he" Earl
(Yes I am crazy)

RevengeIsMine
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since 2006-07-08
Posts 820
Australia
3 posted 2008-03-13 12:43 PM


Nice poem.. Its sincerly sad that u felt the need to believe the last poem i wrote was about u.. it actually wasn't believe it or not.. I thought our fighting was done, i thought i called a truce.. and then u go and scorn me again.. hell if u wanted to win i would of let u.. too bad u didn't tell me before you decided to obliviously scorn me in public.. You HAVE IT NOW.. VICTORY IS YOURS, I'll take me sorry arse outta here and go back to being the person you keep dangerously accusing..
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with you
4 posted 2008-03-13 10:14 AM


you two need to keep your private stuff private. I don't want to see your relationship, whatever it was, splashed all over teen. It's obvious....and it's not cool to do it here, EITHER of you.....
I'm not saying don't post your poetry, but if you guys had a falling out, leave it on the ground and walk away. If you are both done, be done, if you are both hurt, go lick your wounds and leave each other alone. Enough already...

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