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A SIMPLE MAN..
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A SIMPLE MAN.. |
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fromme2U Member
since 2007-11-09
Posts 257 |
FAILING, TRAILING SCALING UP THE WALL OF ANCIENT PREVAILING THUNDER, BLUNDER CRASH DOWN HARD WITH EARTH’S SAND UNDER GET UP, STEP UP, REACH UP FOR LIFE’S GOLDEN CUP SWEAT, TEARS AND HIDDEN FEARS UNLEASHES A DEMON TO MAKE SANITY DISAPPEAR. FALL, FALL DOWN TO THE GROUND STAY LAYED OUT FOR THERE IS NO ONE AROUND SPLURTING, HURTING, A WEAKLING CONVERTING INSANITY, PROFANITY, IT’S A BLOW TO MY EGO’S VANITY ONCE AGAIN I SIT CONTEMPLATING WITH MY WEAK AND STRONG MIND DEBATING. READY, STILL UNSTEADY, CRITICISM, OPTIMISM, CONFUSION IT’S ALL AN ILLUSION SO THIS IS MY CONCLUSION: A MAN CAN CLIMB THE HIGHEST MOUNTAIN THINK THAT HIS PRIDE IS HIS YOUTHFUL FOUNTAIN ONLY TO OPEN A WOUND IN HIS MANLY EGO WHEN HE KNOWS HE CAN’T BE MORE THAN A COMMON MAN IN A TUXEDO. HE MAY TRY TO PERCEIVE HIS GOAL WITH PAIN ONLY TO EVENTUALLY DISAPPEAR LIKE DAVID BLAIN HE WILL QUESTION HIS POSITIVE THOUGHTS AND UNSTEADY ONES TOO BUT HE WILL BE LEFT RIGHT BACK WHERE HE STARTED A MAN WITH TOO MUCH PRIDE WHO EVENTUALLY BECAME COLD HEARTED! |
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RedNail Member
since 2008-02-29
Posts 65Stockholm, Sweden |
I think this is a great poem, however, it's a little hard to read in capital letters. No critique to the poem however, it's very well written and I'm especially fond of this part: "SWEAT, TEARS AND HIDDEN FEARS UNLEASHES A DEMON TO MAKE SANITY DISAPPEAR." Life is a rollercoster, live for the ride. |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Powerful ARCTIC WIND |
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fromme2U Member
since 2007-11-09
Posts 257 |
thank you.. |
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