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fromme2U
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0 posted 2008-03-03 12:32 PM



FAILING, TRAILING SCALING UP THE WALL OF ANCIENT PREVAILING
THUNDER, BLUNDER CRASH DOWN HARD WITH EARTH’S SAND UNDER
GET UP, STEP UP, REACH UP FOR LIFE’S GOLDEN CUP
SWEAT, TEARS AND HIDDEN FEARS UNLEASHES A DEMON TO MAKE SANITY DISAPPEAR.
FALL, FALL DOWN TO THE GROUND
STAY LAYED OUT FOR THERE IS NO ONE AROUND
SPLURTING, HURTING, A WEAKLING CONVERTING
INSANITY, PROFANITY, IT’S A BLOW TO MY EGO’S VANITY
ONCE AGAIN I SIT CONTEMPLATING WITH MY WEAK AND STRONG MIND DEBATING.
READY, STILL UNSTEADY, CRITICISM, OPTIMISM, CONFUSION
IT’S ALL AN ILLUSION SO THIS IS MY CONCLUSION:

A MAN CAN CLIMB THE HIGHEST MOUNTAIN
THINK THAT HIS PRIDE IS HIS YOUTHFUL FOUNTAIN
ONLY TO OPEN A WOUND IN HIS MANLY EGO
WHEN HE KNOWS HE CAN’T BE MORE THAN A COMMON MAN IN A TUXEDO.
HE MAY TRY TO PERCEIVE HIS GOAL WITH PAIN
ONLY TO EVENTUALLY DISAPPEAR LIKE DAVID BLAIN
HE WILL QUESTION HIS POSITIVE THOUGHTS AND UNSTEADY ONES TOO
BUT HE WILL BE LEFT RIGHT BACK WHERE HE STARTED
A MAN WITH TOO MUCH PRIDE WHO EVENTUALLY BECAME COLD HEARTED!

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RedNail
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since 2008-02-29
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1 posted 2008-03-03 01:39 PM


I think this is a great poem, however, it's a little hard to read in capital letters. No critique to the poem however, it's very well written and I'm especially fond of this part:
"SWEAT, TEARS AND HIDDEN FEARS UNLEASHES A DEMON TO MAKE SANITY DISAPPEAR."

Life is a rollercoster, live for the ride.

Artic Wind
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2 posted 2008-03-03 05:34 PM


Powerful

ARCTIC WIND

fromme2U
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3 posted 2008-03-05 12:54 PM


thank you..
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