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wishesanddreams
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since 2008-02-26
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0 posted 2008-03-01 01:16 AM



they are stolen right before my eyes
not able to do anything
left to die
wanting something true
yet every time I try
I want to die
alone, wanting to cry
they are stolen right before my eyes
forgot me like I'm just imaginary
how could they hurt me?
why does it happen?
what can I do to make not come true?
in the dark with my knife
can I do it?
will it happen this time?
the pain inside is growing
bigger by the second
yet no one seems to care
no one sees me cry
why is it like this?
why cant I die?
they are stolen right before my eyes
alone,
left to die
why do I even try?

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XxForever.BrokenxX
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Neverland
1 posted 2008-03-01 01:26 AM


beautiful poem, but don't worry to much. seems that the character in your poem is confused, nobody knows everything. Questions take up lots of our time, don't let them consume you. and again, beautiful poem.

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Broken Toy
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since 2008-02-29
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ThatSmallWorldCalledInsanity
2 posted 2008-03-01 08:42 AM


Love it. The lines are so beautifully emotive, and the lines:
"yet no one seems to care
no one sees me cry"
are so true and the character in your poem is obviously suffering with no one to help them. Keep up the good writing.

I am a broken toy,
Of no use to anyone,
But if you fix me up,
I'm sure we'll have some fun.

Falling rain
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3 posted 2008-03-01 11:12 AM


i hope things get better. and great poem. keep up the good work!!


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