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Hollowed By Darkness
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Hollowed By Darkness |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
 Hollowed By Darkness Darkness fills her mind as everything inside is empty. Alone in silence, she suffers -- paying for her sins. Along the shore, crows circle around her in endless flocks -- blocking out the moon. Slowly she sheds a tear that slips into the ocean in silence. No love is left inside of her soul and heart for she is hollowed by Darkness. ARCTIC WIND Life isn't just given to you Life is about Creating it ...... -Arctic Wind |
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Falling rain
since 2008-01-31
Posts 2178Small town, Illinois |
didnt you allready post this poem in Dark poetry 4? This is a great poem but why post it on other forum ? ~Zach~ |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Falling Rain- I didn't in dark poetry and because I wanted to write poems for this forum too, and I thought this would be a good Poem to be my introduction to this place! ARCTIC WIND |
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XxForever.BrokenxX Senior Member
since 2008-01-20
Posts 891Neverland |
I like how you put a picture up to give us an idea of what was going on. Great job. FoReVeR.BrOkEn |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Forever Broken- Thank you! so Much! I am glad you enjoyed the picture and the write!  ARCTIC WIND |
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Falling rain
since 2008-01-31
Posts 2178Small town, Illinois |
oh ic . i was just wondering why. great job on the poem, the picture is really cool. keep up the good work!! ~Zach~ |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Falling Rain- Yupp! ARCTIC WIND |
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Dark Star Member
since 2008-02-20
Posts 392Lost in your eyes |
darkness is in everyone, but its up to people to control it.. |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Dark Star- Welcome to pip!!!!! ARCTIC WIND |
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Clockwork_Orange Senior Member
since 2007-03-23
Posts 620Space Camp, IN |
very nice imagery. i could picture it in my head. nice. |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
clock_work- Thank you! ARCTIC WIND |
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surf_painter Member
since 2007-04-10
Posts 434Canada |
I liked this but I found the sentences to be a little run on, much like you would think in an essay but rather for a poem. I just think the lines could have been seperated a bit better but it was still lovely |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Surf_painter- Thank you for your intake of looking at my poem!-- I like how you give me suggestions to what I should do. Thanks!I like it though lol, But thanks for the suggestion..... Maybe in the future I will really take that as something I should look at and realize maybe I just might do that! Thank you for taking your time, to read my post! ARCTIC WIND |
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fromme2U Member
since 2007-11-09
Posts 257 |
I WAS READING A FEW POEMS AND CAME ACROSS YOURS NOW I HAVE READ SOME OF YOUR POEMS AND BELIEVE ME WHEN I SAY YOU ARE A GREAT POET I ALWAYS ENJOY YOUR WRITES...THIS ONE WAS SHORT AND VERY CREATIVE...GREAT JOB! |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Fromme2u- Thank you so much! ARCTIC WIND |
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Lady Ayla Member
since 2008-07-19
Posts 84WV, United States |
Did the picture inspire you to write the poem, or did you kinda stumble upon it sometime afterwards? |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Lady A! First of all, WOW!, I thought this one was long gone, I am happy that you brought it back Ummm, I wrote the poem when I googled some pictures and I found this one randomly and wrote a dark poem, but it isn't exactly the write about the picture, it just inspired me to write dark! Thanks for clicking ARCTIC WIND |
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Dark Star Member
since 2008-02-20
Posts 392Lost in your eyes |
nice  |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Dark Star! Thanks so much! ARCTIC WIND |
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Dark Star Member
since 2008-02-20
Posts 392Lost in your eyes |
welcome sharry |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
ARCTIC WIND |
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