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Teen Poetry #8

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crimsonXnails
Member

since 2008-02-10

Posts 108
dark/little/heavan.:*:.

0 posted 2008-02-18 11:34 PM

my nose is running,
my eyes are bleeding,
hanging onto the flotsam,
cause the light house
is receeding.

when u tossed me overboard,
just to lighten the load,
i screamed for your arms
would you really do this?
no.

i tell myself this,
just so i can dismiss,
you as the bad guy,
what did you mean,
with each kiss?

i'm wet and cold,
sea salt stings my throat,
as i suck in a breath,
so that i can
stay afloat.

my body hits the rocks,
as i clean off ocean froth
i look out into sea,
did your vessal
reach the docks?

i see a figure on
the divident beach lawn
and see you there
but when i call,
you're gone.

a goast you seemed,
again you found me,
and when i reached out
you
screamed.

my scars and bruises screech,
though i'm dead as each,
of the rocks that i haunt
on this
abandoned beach.

if you can touch me, i know i'm still only dying

XxForever.BrokenxX
Senior Member

since 2008-01-20

Posts 891
Neverland

1 posted 2008-02-18 11:56 PM

This reminds me of Twilight. When Bella's drwoning. Good job...though it mad me sad.

FoReVeR.BrOkEn

young_blood
Senior Member

since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

2 posted 2008-02-19 12:01 PM

this had some good moments of imagery, however the spelling errors made this a little hard to read. keep writing!

crimsonXnails
Member

since 2008-02-10

Posts 108
dark/little/heavan.:*:.

3 posted 2008-02-19 12:29 PM

hey hey,
srry, i was planning on writing a note to warn of errors. thanx fer reading anywho.
!Tracey!

if you can touch me, i know i'm still only dying

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