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Earl Robertson Senior Member
since 2008-01-21
Posts 753BC, Canada |
Everyone we wish to see Who from us do never flee Have a kind of love within Searching not for any sin We will take you yet unproved If your mask will be removed Wanting heaven you must reject hell Before you decide hear what I’ve to tell Know we love you sister, and friend And you could our world end Light it can be found again Love you can again attain Let us help the pain inside And with you fore’er abide If you will I’ll be your guide And from your life I’ll never hide "Be Strong and Always Remember what made you you." Earl |
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RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed Senior Member
since 2007-06-11
Posts 1062In Love <3 |
We will take you yet unproved If your mask will be removed aww you make me want to cry- it's so beautiful, lucky girl. -Kate and in the daylight i miss the nightmare- but deathly fear it in the dark of night |
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Earl Robertson Senior Member
since 2008-01-21
Posts 753BC, Canada |
"lucky girl" heh or not. I wrote this poem to try and pull her out of depression  . I think it worked, she started coming to school again at least. Anyway thanks for the reply, I'm glad you like it. ps This could apply to others in my life as well, but it's a very long twisted and quite frankly poetic story so... "Be Strong and Always Remember what made you you." Earl |
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RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed Senior Member
since 2007-06-11
Posts 1062In Love <3 |
aww that reminds me of what my friend steve did for me last year- you see i was angry at him and brandon, so since i'm such a poet he goes and writes me a poem saying i'm sorry - it was the sweetest ever. -Kate and in the daylight i miss the nightmare- but deathly fear it in the dark of night |
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young_blood Senior Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115Indianapolis, IN |
To be honest, I like it when you are more calculating. You have a fantastic way with making a poem seem sterile, this one gushes and makes quite a mess. Shall I find a tourniquite? J/k, this is quite pretty, but again I prefer your cold side. |
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Earl Robertson Senior Member
since 2008-01-21
Posts 753BC, Canada |
I see your point young_blood. I'm better with riddles than straight out explanations. "Be Strong and Always Remember what made you you." Earl |
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