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XxForever.BrokenxX
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since 2008-01-20
Posts 891
Neverland

0 posted 2008-02-09 03:22 AM



Tired of it all, the
whispering hate. Why
do i still remain here,
when this time it is
clearly my fate.

I could escape it all,
but something holds me
here. I could live in
happyness, far away from
fear.

I could make it happen,
I could pull it off!
This could be simple,
simple and soft. I'd
be saving myself really,
from this messed up life.
Never again to be pushed
down, always living how I
would like.
~everyone pays the price that others
charge. Nobodies perfect, so why do
we prented to be?

FoReVeR.BrOkEn

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effjayel
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since 2007-09-30
Posts 1474
At the Crossroads of Infinity
1 posted 2008-02-09 04:40 AM


Emily

Most people have 2 personas, the one they wear in public and a private one..in other words they 'pretend' to be perfect as you say..You need to be happy with who you are & not worry what others say or think, if they don't like you, they don't have to look at you! I guess what I'm trying to say is don't let the other you bring you down, fight it & you will come out the other side..hope that makes sense, and welcome to Pip, look forward to seeing more of your stuff on here....

John

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2 posted 2008-02-09 09:08 AM


OMG! this is soo good! im amazed by your talent. =]
Earl Robertson
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since 2008-01-21
Posts 753
BC, Canada
3 posted 2008-02-09 11:00 AM


I agree with John. However my resonse is slightly less rational. It makes me SO MAD that I and others around me can't get rid of those personas! Your poem raises a question I've thought a lot about and one that had me in depression for about two years.
This is an emotional topic for me.
Exellent poem!

"Be Strong and Always Remember what made you you." Earl

"Ooo!!! Ooo!! I know! I know! um...he he" Earl
(Yes I am crazy)

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