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RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
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0 posted 2008-02-08 07:17 PM



Do my Words Play in your Head?

Do my words play in your mind?
Like the words of children’s rhyme
That with once ago- in child’s place
You with love and hope embraced

Are you tired of standing still?
When there’s so much time to kill
Waking up the world beneath
In disbeliever’s disbelief

I hope that maybe you will see
What my dear words have meant to me
They make up most of what I am
Building refuge like a dam

I want my words to last through time
With a note that they are mine
With one look at this sentence
I have set the greatest pretense

Do my words play in your mind?
Like the words of children’s rhyme
That with once ago- in child’s place
You with love and hope embraced


and in the daylight i miss the nightmare- but deathly fear it in the dark of night

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Earl Robertson
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since 2008-01-21
Posts 753
BC, Canada
1 posted 2008-02-08 07:23 PM


Yes!! This is great Kate (hey that rymes lol) Exelent poem
Are you tired of standing still?
When there’s so much time to kill
Waking up the world beneath
In disbeliever’s disbelief

I hope that maybe you will see
What my dear words have meant to me
They make up most of what I am
Building refuge like a dam

I loved those two stanzas particularly
great meaning.

"Be Strong and Always Remember what made you you." Earl

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(Yes I am crazy)

hunnie_girl
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2 posted 2008-02-09 02:46 PM


wow Kate Darlin' each poem i read just gets better and better!!! I loved this one!!!!1 amazazing write
Krysti

lovergurl
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since 2007-05-08
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va
3 posted 2008-02-10 02:04 PM


wow.
great rhyming.
this is a excellent poem.

Artic Wind
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since 2007-09-16
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4 posted 2008-02-19 05:42 PM


I agree they are getting better each time I read Them

ARCTIC WIND

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