A dream so small.and a storm so big

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Teen Poetry #8

A dream so small.and a storm so big

I am the arch angel
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since 2008-02-02

Posts 167
nowhere,illinois,USA

0 posted 2008-02-06 06:27 PM

I look out my window,skies aren't blue
I take a walk without a clue

Rain is pouring on my face
I just saw a house disappear without a trace

My clothes are soaked with water
That man is missing his daughter

The sky is crying
The land is dying

There are people screaming
But no one is dreaming

I wake up with a sweat
I look out the window and give a look of dread

~-Keagan-~

Falling rain

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since 2008-01-31

Posts 2178
Small town, Illinois

1 posted 2008-02-06 09:35 PM

Not bad. its not my favorite poem of yours but its allright. keep up the good work! =]

XxForever.BrokenxX
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since 2008-01-20

Posts 891
Neverland

2 posted 2008-02-06 10:00 PM

it's an okay poem. Though it seemed a little random like you were forcing yourself to write it. Remember, you don't always have to ryhme in you'r poems.

FoReVeR.BrOkEn

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