Teen Poetry #8 |
Words Like Velvet |
Ri Member
since 2008-02-01
Posts 67Blackburn, England |
Words like velvet, face like thunder The truth lies behind your eyes As my hope begins to plunder See my sighs as silent cries Before my heart plummets under. In a sea that offers no disguise When you frown at me I drown Under the storm of burning eyes Pushing down, you take my crown I see behind your waves of lies Like post eclipse sun, I find light I’m hard pressed to know detest So heated that it takes my sight Not at best, my eyes need rest Blinding me, the truth is too bright Where do I head? I find I’m lost Feeling fazed my skies are hazed My stubbornness could come at cost Stakes are raised; I’m never praised I want your warmth but get your frost |
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XxForever.BrokenxX Senior Member
since 2008-01-20
Posts 891Neverland |
hmmm...so true. The last line really sticks out to me. You abviously are an experienced poet. Fantastic first post. I hope to see more from you, I found that truley amazing. And welcome to Passions. FoReVeR.BrOkEn |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
Rian, amazing poem And WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!! hope to read more soon Krysti |
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Falling rain
since 2008-01-31
Posts 2178Small town, Illinois |
Amazing poem. Your really good at writing poetry. I cant wait to see more of your work. And welcome to Passions! =) |
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RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed Senior Member
since 2007-06-11
Posts 1062In Love <3 |
hey rian welcome- incredible first post, i'll be looking for more. -Kate and in the daylight i miss the nightmare- but deathly fear it in the dark of night |
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Earl Robertson Senior Member
since 2008-01-21
Posts 753BC, Canada |
Ri you amaze me! This is such a great poem. It has great meaning to me especialy I think. (excluding yourself of course.) Exelent first post: you're in my library for sure! "Be Strong and Always Remember what made you you." Earl |
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Ri Member
since 2008-02-01
Posts 67Blackburn, England |
Thanks for the feedback, you've been instantly welcoming |
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