Teen Poetry #8 |
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Just another poem... |
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rebel~angel Member
since 2006-06-20
Posts 71Iowa USA |
~Any ideas for a title?~ She looks at him and he looks at her and by the look in his eye, she knows. She knows its all over, not even begun it was too much to ask of one who only can run can't even hide she can't take it back or make him forget she wants him to know wants him to regret It might not be much but it'll haunt him forever she said I love you-- he said whatever. Remember:Tuck your chin, you're going to get hurt, so expect it and be ready. You might as well see it coming. |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
"It might not be much but it'll haunt him forever she said I love you-- he said whatever." Wow... This poem was amazing! I loved the whole poem. There is nothing in this one that I would change. As for a title, maybe something like "run" but I'm not very good at titles... Thanks for sharing! ![]() "I will love the light for it shows me the way, yet I will endure the darkness for it shows me the stars." - Og Mandino @-->--- |
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Tempest Member
since 2006-04-28
Posts 247dont eat paint chips!!!! |
talent shows in the piece and reflects on the authors thoughts, very nice. ~Tempest~ |
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hunnie_girl![]() ![]()
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
this was a beautiful write good poem hope to read more poems from you soon... hunnie* ![]() A time to love, and a time to hate; a time of war and a time for peace ~Ecclesiastes 3:8~ |
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pen&paper Senior Member
since 2006-06-06
Posts 513 |
AMAZING WRITE!!!! as for a title what about "And He Said Whatever" ? |
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pip_man Member
since 2006-07-15
Posts 70Canada |
I really liked this poem, I can relate. I agree with the title for the poem^. Hope to see more. Great write! "When the power of love overcomes the love of power, the world will know peace." |
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rhia_5779 Senior Member
since 2006-06-09
Posts 1334California |
How about Whatever being the title. I love the ending, when I first read it I thought it needs work but now no . Its really good, and everyone can probaly relate. |
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rhia_5779 Senior Member
since 2006-06-09
Posts 1334California |
Rereading this is soo good. My best friend writes too, can I email this to her and show it to her? I will tell her that a friend of mine wrote it. I swear. She really likes reading poetry. I send her mine. I would send her this link but she won't go to it. If I email her she will read it, cause she always reads the emails i send her. Please. THis is the best I have read by you. It just hit me. I can relate right now so much. |
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