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shattered-smiles
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since 2008-01-20

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inside the shadows

0 posted 2008-01-23 06:28 PM

I know you think I'm strong
but deep down inside
my heart's tearing me apart

When I'm all by myself
the tears come raining down
i'm not as strong as you thought

This pain never seems to end
the tears keep falling
my heart keeps breaking

I'm not as strong as you thought

Jaki H
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since 2008-01-19

Posts 232
NJ, USA

1 posted 2008-01-23 06:33 PM

wow... really good. is the last part supposed to be "thought" or "though"? good both ways, but I would go with "thought"

really great poem though!

shattered-smiles
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inside the shadows

2 posted 2008-01-23 06:40 PM

Sorry Jaki H. I forgot the last 't'. I just edited it now. Thanx for the comment.

hunnie_girl

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since 2006-06-18

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3 posted 2008-01-23 10:22 PM

Love this poem TJ...
Krysti

shattered-smiles
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4 posted 2008-01-23 10:33 PM

Thanx for the comment Krysti. I don't know if others actually get this poem unless they've been through it.
TJ

[&] she's a blood broken rose

Earl Robertson
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since 2008-01-21

Posts 753
BC, Canada

5 posted 2008-01-23 10:46 PM

Amazing! Reminds me of myself a few years ago. It's funny how we mask our emotions isn't it. Everyone expects us to be so strong and somtimes we can be, but by ourselves...somtimes not.

"Be Strong and Always Remember what made you you." Earl

"Ooo!!! Ooo!! I know! I know! um...he he" Earl
(Yes I am crazy)

wolf girl
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since 2007-12-03

Posts 150
washington, US

6 posted 2008-01-23 11:30 PM

this is amazing short but sweet. i can really relate. when im alone is when things fall apart.

-jenna

Clockwork_Orange
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since 2007-03-23

Posts 620
Space Camp, IN

7 posted 2008-01-24 05:13 AM

i think your writing is strong...does that count??

shattered-smiles
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inside the shadows

8 posted 2008-01-24 08:34 AM

You really think my writing is strong Orange? Wow, thanx! I never expected to get a compliment such as that. I love your poems also. And thanx everyone else for the comments. You wouldn't believe how young I was when I wrote this.
TJ

hunnie_girl

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since 2006-06-18

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9 posted 2008-01-25 01:05 AM

you were young wen you wrote this?? but it wuz sooo good

reallly know where you are coming from

Krysti

shattered-smiles
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inside the shadows

10 posted 2008-01-25 07:49 AM

Well, if you call 13 young. I was 13 when I wrote Strong.
TJ

[&] she's a blood broken rose

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