Song's About Rain ( Tribute To Clockwork Orange's December Rain)

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Song's About Rain ( Tribute To Clockwork Orange's December Rain)

RevengeIsMine
Senior Member

since 2006-07-08

Posts 820
Australia

0 posted 2008-01-22 02:16 AM

Okay Guys I haven't written a sequal since Tempest was around and now i found the perfect poem to write a sequal too.. This has every ounce of me poured into and this is for Bryan.. they guy that taught me how to love..

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Songs About Rain
(10 years, 6 months and 5 days into the future)

I sit here on this veranda
Your hand clenched in mine
I still remember the day you said you loved me
In fact I can still remember the time

It was 2.45 February 15
In the back of your old car
You played me a song that you wrote
On your old acoustic guitar

Tears rolled down my face
I’d never felt a love so strong
You said you’d never disappoint me
And you never did do wrong

We have six beautiful children
2 boys and 4 girls
They all look like you
Except they have my curls

The December rain is falling
You’re sitting in the storm
But the only difference this time
Is having me to keep you warm

You've never screwed up
You've let nobody down
You've made it in life
And you deserve your crown

No matter where the future takes us
We will live and breathe as one
I need you like a heart needs a beat
Like a flower needs the sun

The night never looked more beautiful
And we have nothing else to gain
So sit here with me and our baby
And sing me songs about rain

[This message has been edited by RevengeIsMine (01-22-2008 05:06 AM).]

Clockwork_Orange
Senior Member

since 2007-03-23

Posts 620
Space Camp, IN

1 posted 2008-01-22 06:21 AM

beautiful. i think this is the greatest thing in the world.

RevengeIsMine
Senior Member

since 2006-07-08

Posts 820
Australia

2 posted 2008-01-22 07:22 AM

Aww thankyou so so much.. glad you enjoyed it..

Much Love.
Jess.. xoxo

hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

3 posted 2008-01-22 12:16 PM

Oh Jess this was amazing… simply beautiful. And Bryan you are my hero to inspire Jess to write something like this!
Great poem
Krysti

Heaven'sLilAngel
New Member

since 2008-01-23

Posts 6
Australia

4 posted 2008-01-23 01:46 AM

Hey Gorgeous Gal!!.. This was a great write by you.. i'm glad i joined this place it looks amazingly promising..

Luv's ya muchly

XxForever.BrokenxX
Senior Member

since 2008-01-20

Posts 891
Neverland

5 posted 2008-01-26 01:29 AM

wow, this is a really special peom. I'm not sure how else to discribe it. But it is beautiful! Fantastic write

FoReVeR.BrOkEn

Falling rain

Member Elite

since 2008-01-31

Posts 2178
Small town, Illinois

6 posted 2008-02-01 06:06 PM

Hey im Falling Rain or you can call me Zach. This is a great poem. I like it. it has a nice, clean flow to it. bravo! lol

fromme2U
Member

since 2007-11-09

Posts 257

7 posted 2008-02-07 01:23 PM

This deserves only one word "BEAUTIFUL!!"

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