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Jaki H
Member

since 2008-01-19

Posts 232
NJ, USA

0 posted 2008-01-20 12:11 PM

yet again, its really untitled...
and it didnt really happen, its more of a general insight on human behavior.
hope you like!
xoxo, Jaki H

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speak, laugh, gossip, talk-
a sunny day, a friendly walk

bicker, argue, disagree-
will you still be friends with me?

anger building, somewhat mad-
one seven year old- sobbing, sad

Scream! Fight! run away-
a friend chasing after, to save the day

Cornered! in the freezing rain-
heart on Fire- searing pain

Cornered! on a Bridge! way up high-
one makes Excuses, Both kids cry

Cornered! CORNERED! What do I do?
I don't Want to be friends with you!

Hit the ground-
Sickly sound-
an Arguement, over a Merry-Go-Round!

RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
Senior Member

since 2007-06-11

Posts 1062
In Love <3

1 posted 2008-01-20 12:13 PM

ha haha so cute! it was adorable. lol.

-Kate

and in the daylight i miss the nightmare- but deathly fear it in the dark of night

Jaki H
Member

since 2008-01-19

Posts 232
NJ, USA

2 posted 2008-01-20 01:05 PM

thank you!

RevengeIsMine
Senior Member

since 2006-07-08

Posts 820
Australia

3 posted 2008-01-20 08:36 PM

hi..
this is great made me laugh.. ur a good adaption in here and you've gained a fan within me..

hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

4 posted 2008-01-21 01:00 AM

Wow Welcome To Passions I hope you like it here..... I absolutly lloved this poem amazing flow and everything.. great subject

Krysti

fromme2U
Member

since 2007-11-09

Posts 257

5 posted 2008-01-21 03:41 PM

Wow! this was enlightening. nice work

Jaki H
Member

since 2008-01-19

Posts 232
NJ, USA

6 posted 2008-01-21 03:44 PM

oh wow!!!! thank you everyone!!!! you cant see me but im glowing with happiness right now!!!

infact, its martin luther king day so i have no homework! im gonna go write more!!!

too bad my other poems arent as well recieved--- oh well! cant have good ones all the time!!!=)

thanks again everyone!!!

justanotherstorm
Member

since 2007-10-24

Posts 321

7 posted 2008-01-23 12:17 PM

dang this is tight it kinda mad me laugh but in a cute way iono well cool poem

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