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Teen Poetry #8

Wishes

Sweetpoet16m4u04
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since 2002-11-10

Posts 153
Ma, U.S.A

0 posted 2008-01-14 03:18 PM

Wishes

I wish I could be the one
You think of day and night
I wish I could be the one
You wish you could hold tight

I wish I could be the one
You want in every way
I wish I could be that one
You love more and more each day

I wish I could be the one
To look into those sparkling eyes
I wish I could be the one
That gets your every surprise

I wish I could show you
That you mean everything to me
And I wish you could be the one
To love me for me.

I wish I could be the one,
to have the strength to tell.
I wish I could be the one,
to have you wishing for me as well.

wolf girl
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since 2007-12-03

Posts 150
washington, US

1 posted 2008-01-14 08:18 PM

this was really good and i liked it.

-jenna

hunnie_girl

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since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

2 posted 2008-01-15 03:10 PM

oh.. hunn.... this wuz soo beautiful I really really loved it.........
Krysti

surf_painter
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since 2007-04-10

Posts 434
Canada

3 posted 2008-01-16 09:40 PM

I liked it but I think you repeated the line "I wish you could" much too much sorry

Jaki H
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since 2008-01-19

Posts 232
NJ, USA

4 posted 2008-01-19 05:59 PM

i love it! especially the last stanza!

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