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Feeling the pain of that tear
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Feeling the pain of that tear |
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Assassin_of_Verse Member
since 2007-10-23
Posts 330that So Cal |
Feeling the pain of that tear I dream on the inside, laughing at the pain. I grin on the outside, as if I'm insane. Although it's not a rose I see, all I can see is red. But then again, it's only a dream I dream in bed. I can't walk away, nor can I repent. It's like I feel, it was worth every cent. If it weren't for the fact, that I've spent all my tears, I'd feel as if, I've spent all my fears. I turn back, not as I planned, wanting to take, your beckoning hand. Note: This is kind of a reflection on my previous poem, "Tears". We are each of us angels with only one wing. And we can only fly by embracing each other. |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
Andrew.... I loved this.. but then again I love all of your poems Great write  Krysti |
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RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed Senior Member
since 2007-06-11
Posts 1062In Love <3 |
ummm, i have but one small offering of help, the second dream in it's only a dream I dream in bed. i would say dreamt instead of dream, but it's just a suggestion. but i loved it, really loved it. -Kate and in the daylight i miss the nightmare- but deathly fear it in the dark of night |
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Assassin_of_Verse Member
since 2007-10-23
Posts 330that So Cal |
Haha! Thank you Kate! My grammar was a off... I should have made it clearer: What I mean when I use "dream" instead of "dreamt" is that I continue to dream about and think about this certain thing. Thanks for the comments! (Both of you)  |
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