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Teen Poetry #8
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ily06.12.07
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since 2007-11-24
Posts 15


0 posted 2007-12-24 09:42 AM


Just For An Hour Or Maybe Two,
I Just Want You Close To Me,
Show Me You Love Me.
Your Becoming Distant,
I Dont See You Every Day,
I Dont Fall Asleep In Your Arms
Anymore At Night.
I Miss You More Than You Think,
Even If I Just Saw You Yesterday.
I Just Feel So Incomplete,
Missing A Big Piece Of Me,
So Lost Without Your Touch,
And Your Voice.
I Want To Be The First Person
You see When You Wake Up,
And The Last Person You See
Before You Fall Asleep.
I Want To Wake Up To Your
Voice and Your Touch.
I Want To Fall Asleep In
Your Arms Every Night.
I Just Want You Near Again,
Because Without You
I Cant Go Through A Normal Day,
I Cant Fall Asleep,
I Cant Think,
And I Cry For No Reason.
I Just Love You So Much,
And It Gets Harder Every Day
Im Without You.
Forever And Always Is All Im Asking For Babe.


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Belinda
Member
since 2006-01-30
Posts 126
UK
1 posted 2007-12-25 04:13 PM


Good write, I can relate.

One thing I would say is don't use a capital letter at the beginning of every word because it's distracting, I used to do it until people pointed it out.

apart from that I was impressed.

nice one (Y)

Expect nothing, Prepare for anything.

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