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wolf girl Member
since 2007-12-03
Posts 150washington, US |
it was me or her you choose her how could you? the pain goes so deep i cant even cry i just want to die i give up thinking only of the pain will i get up tomorrow? is there a point? i guess if i keep trying maybe things will get better just maybe |
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Elias Nevermore Member
since 2007-11-03
Posts 152 |
your poem was okay i frankly didn't like the rhyme scheme. The poem didn't flow too well either. I feel that you had a good concept so you should rework the poem, and try to make it flow better and fix the rhymes scheme |
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