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Teen Poetry #8

The Day Poetry Died

jayjara
Member

since 2007-05-02

Posts 90
Florida

0 posted 2007-12-08 10:56 PM

Swung out spinning empty chambers
no mass left to ripple vibrations
into a tsunamis of hell-bound creatures
torturing my fingertips to shred
disease onto blank pages.
I'll ignite this graphite only
to see it blaze and vaporize
to dust like coca plantains
with fantasy fertilizer found in our dreams;
it'll suppress my appetite, deluding
my last write, while peeking over
my shoulder from temporary paranoia.
We wish upon exploding stars,
raining acid on my lips,
tasting you with bitter disbelief;
a masked monster conforms my work
leaving me a rested widow.
The coffin is lowered into a deep
abyss screaming "blessed are the dead,
for they rest from their labors."

-J

lovelikewinter
New Member

since 2007-12-09

Posts 4

1 posted 2007-12-09 12:18 PM

wow. i really liked that.
i loved your choice of words and there was a nice flow to it.

i wasn't crazy about this phrase:
"to dust like coca plantains
with fantasy fertilizer found in our dreams"

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