To the burdened 1st born and the neglected sibling

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Teen Poetry #8

To the burdened 1st born and the neglected sibling

Assassin_of_Verse
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since 2007-10-23

Posts 330
that So Cal

0 posted 2007-12-03 11:41 PM

First in the womb,
first to the tree.
First in line,
poor, poor me.

First to be punished,
first to be praised.
First to be
so smartly raised.

Always responsible,
always respected.
So much from me
is always expected.

Still shadowed
by my father's success.
(They'll disown me if
I turn out less)

They love me,
(this I know)
but its choking me,
from head to toe.

It's too much
for me to bear.
Yet I still work,
to calm their glare.

I know I am loved,
I know I am blessed.
But is it so wrong,
to ask for some rest?

We are each of us angels with only one wing. And we can only fly by embracing each other.
-Luciano De Creshenzo

An assassin-in-training shouldn't.

hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

1 posted 2007-12-04 01:34 AM

Andrew loved this amazing write

Krysti

Elias Nevermore
Member

since 2007-11-03

Posts 152

2 posted 2007-12-04 01:54 AM

hey andrew, good poem.

RevengeIsMine
Senior Member

since 2006-07-08

Posts 820
Australia

3 posted 2007-12-04 07:23 AM

This poem reminds me of the same thing i ask myself everyday. Great Write...

Assassin_of_Verse
Member

since 2007-10-23

Posts 330
that So Cal

4 posted 2007-12-04 09:29 PM

Thanks guys, I've been feeling a lot of pressure lately, and this was me blowing off some steam. But I'm not sure if this is really done yet. It still feels too raw.

What do you think?

I'm also thinking about writing one from another POV (Look at the 2nd part of the title).

We are each of us angels with only one wing. And we can only fly by embracing each other.
-Luciano De Creshenzo

An assassin-in-training shouldn't.

*CaT*
Junior Member

since 2007-12-07

Posts 46
Oxford, England

5 posted 2007-12-07 02:16 PM

This is such a great poem. I can really relate to it. Love the style of writing

*CaT*
Junior Member

since 2007-12-07

Posts 46
Oxford, England

6 posted 2007-12-07 04:26 PM

Thank you for the comment about my poem. I wrote it when i was 12 lol

RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
Senior Member

since 2007-06-11

Posts 1062
In Love <3

7 posted 2007-12-08 08:56 PM

i am there too andrew. being the oldest is both a pain and a joy. very well said. i appricated this it's going in my library so i can pull it out when i feel this way, thanks.

-Kate

"I have no other but a woman's reason:
I think him so, because I think him so."

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