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greeneggs-n-ham
Junior Member

since 2007-06-05

Posts 14

0 posted 2007-12-01 06:55 PM

i wrote this a couple of weeks ago, but i just found it in my journal. Its not that great, but ive been going through some writers block, and sense its halfway decent, i decided i may as well post it.
whatcha think?

Your Eyes- October 2007
My eyes alight
As you walk thru the door
Looking happier now
Than ever before

And holding her hand
Your eyes filled with glee
Eyes only for her
But never for me

I hide my sorrow
Wont let you know
I dont want to hold on
But cant let you go

I want to be happy
But I care more about you
And if she brings you joy
Then Im happy too

I am giving you up
Cuz with her your happy
If what I feel isnt love
What else could it be

basically its about letting go of the person you love because you want them to be happy.

rebelangelv
Senior Member

since 2007-05-28

Posts 538
usa

1 posted 2007-12-01 10:45 PM

i thought it was fine. the second to the last verse was a little...skakey i guess is that word. but is was still good

good job

If i had to choose between you and breathing, id use my last breath to say "I love you"

hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

2 posted 2007-12-02 01:47 AM

Wow I loved this I've been here before definately been here.
Krysti

RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
Senior Member

since 2007-06-11

Posts 1062
In Love <3

3 posted 2007-12-02 08:18 AM

been there, done that, it's true love alright, just letting the other person be happy no matter what, but then again, i suppose even true love can fade into "once beens"

-Kate

"I have no other but a woman's reason:
I think him so, because I think him so."

sexykitten15
Junior Member

since 2007-07-22

Posts 34

4 posted 2007-12-03 06:41 PM

Im there now.. i love this guy and hes a good friend to me but he asked my best friend out and this isnt going well i jsut want to die.

but amazing i love it!!

Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural

5 posted 2007-12-11 07:49 PM

Enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND

wolf girl
Member

since 2007-12-03

Posts 150
washington, US

6 posted 2007-12-11 07:53 PM

i liked it. :]

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