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justanotherstorm
Member

since 2007-10-24

Posts 321

0 posted 2007-11-26 10:09 PM

idk this seemed fun to write so yeah
tell me what u think

just waitin for a reply
to see what they got to say
im sorry for the lies
i do it everyday( not really)
i know i need to stop
lets settle this and talk
do u want to go for a walk
-NO
-whyd u gotta lie
-you always make me cry
-i hate you
why
- just..just get outta my life
im sorry ok
i'll do w/e u say( again not really)
but i aint gettin outta your life
that's not happenin
no way
- fine then i'll go
-goodbye

rebelangelv
Senior Member

since 2007-05-28

Posts 538
usa

1 posted 2007-11-26 11:13 PM

hannah ur work is always confusing to me...this is cool and its good but i cant understand which side its coming from...it seems that from the begining its one person talking and then the second half takes another poit of view w/o warning....i like the insight but u should try making things a little more clear rather than rhyming....n e ways good job as always

If i had to choose between you and breathing, id use my last breath to say "I love you"

maddorani
Member

since 2007-11-18

Posts 423
houston,tx

2 posted 2007-11-27 04:53 PM

yea i liked it too its been awhile since i came on here but its stil good

Assassin_of_Verse
Member

since 2007-10-23

Posts 330
that So Cal

3 posted 2007-11-28 01:34 AM

Dang! This is so similar to what I hear in real life!

Um... I'm thinking all the lines without the dashes are one person's dialogue, while the lines with the dashes are the other person's dialogue.

P.S.
OMG! I was (still am) so stupid! For some stupid reason I assumed you were a guy! Whoa, I am so off these days...

We are each of us angels with only one wing. And we can only fly by embracing each other.
-Luciano De Creshenzo

An assassin-in-training shouldn't.

justanotherstorm
Member

since 2007-10-24

Posts 321

4 posted 2007-11-28 07:20 PM

yeah the lines wit the dashes is another person and the ones w/o is another person
lol i get that a lot well yeah im a girl

Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural

5 posted 2007-12-10 10:09 PM

Enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND

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