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It really doesn’t fit into words . . . .
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It really doesn’t fit into words . . . . |
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RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed Senior Member
since 2007-06-11
Posts 1062In Love <3 |
It really doesn’t fit into words . . . . It’s a cold and lonely place Where the winds unknown Are in a place out of time So coldly blown It’s a small snatch of memory I have hid from all doubt And an accumulation of hatred I know nothing about But it’s taught me my place Where I must lie With superficial living In a place gone by Though, strangely dear You unravel these fabrics And make the wounds Become minuscule nicks Perhaps it’s the rush Of feeling you so near Or the haze you induce That makes my mind unclear But nevertheless, I’m enchanted Like a child to a trick I’m hoping though, that it will last For I’m so tired of being sick
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Assassin_of_Verse Member
since 2007-10-23
Posts 330that So Cal |
"It’s a small snatch of memory I have hid from all doubt And an accumulation of hatred I know nothing about" This stanza stood out to me. I don't fully understand it, but it made me remember something vague... I liked the poem, but I personally thought it wasn't one of your best. A little bit forced, but the main idea is strongly reinforced, so its okay. Sorry if I was too critical, I'm half delirious right now. -Andrew As assassin shouldn't fall in love. |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
Kate I loved this one ther hasnt been to many of your poems i've read latley that i can say bam i can totally relate to but well.. Bam i can totally relate to this  great write Kate darlingKrysti |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed  ARCTIC WIND |
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