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Leanne <3
Member

since 2007-08-25

Posts 216
N.S.W, Australia

0 posted 2007-11-19 12:12 PM

He’s trapped with no escape
In his own little cell
His body the very bars
Keeping him in hell.

Lost in a sea of white
Strapped clinging to a chair
What dignity has he left?
Who’s to show they care?

Covered in white wristbands
Denying him escape
His skin stained blue and black
Distorted out of shape

The sharps disposal unit
Hangs loosely above his bed
Not an inch of empty space inside
Just years of pain instead

He’s body’s cowering from the inside out
It’s slowly giving in
But deep within this shrinking body
Lies a heart that’s free of sin.

Bloodshot eyes look into mine,
Searching for an answer
His mind draws a blank;
Defeated by the cancer.

His smile remains all the same
But his eyes have lost their glow
She prays for the return
Of the man they all used to know

He’s unable to recognize this little girl
He no longer knows her face
But she promises to never forget him
That her memory of him she will never replace.

It was time to say goodbye
She sealed it with a kiss
He looked back at this girl before him
And for just a second, was able to reminisce.

hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

1 posted 2007-11-19 12:22 PM

oh Leanne this was such a sweet sad poem I loved it. It also had a good flow.
Best wishes

Krysti

RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
Senior Member

since 2007-06-11

Posts 1062
In Love <3

2 posted 2007-11-19 06:45 PM

it was well written, only one or two slightly sticky spots- but nevertheless a great and wonderful work of art.

-Kate

"I have no other but a woman's reason:
I think him so, because I think him so."

Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural

3 posted 2007-11-19 08:13 PM

Enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND

rebelangelv
Senior Member

since 2007-05-28

Posts 538
usa

4 posted 2007-11-19 10:53 PM

wow that was really good.

If i had to choose between you and breathing, id use my last breath to say "I love you"

Leanne <3
Member

since 2007-08-25

Posts 216
N.S.W, Australia

5 posted 2007-11-19 11:17 PM

thanks alot guys, i will go over it a few times and try and fix it up.

[xx]

BrittanyJ
Member

since 2007-06-03

Posts 461
Come find me?

6 posted 2007-11-21 07:29 PM

"It was time to say goodbye
She sealed it with a kiss
He looked back at this girl before him
And for just a second, was able to reminisce."

Oh wow. This is so sad...and amazing. Wonderfully written

And i wish you the best.

So no more hiding all your pain, you deserve a new start. That's why i'm closing myself away, this is a message from your heart.

maddorani
Member

since 2007-11-18

Posts 423
houston,tx

7 posted 2007-11-22 12:41 PM

this is a good poem and deep too

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