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BrittanyJ
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since 2007-06-03

Posts 461
Come find me?

0 posted 2007-11-12 09:01 PM

Hey guys, as you know, it's been a while since i've written, so please don't hesitate to share your opinion. I'm a little rusty. Thanks

I have some secrets you'll never know,
Hidden in the darkness of my mind.
The kind that haunt you in the night,
And just don't fade with time.
Like how you stabbed me without a clue,
That's one scar that'll never heal.
The pain is etched upon my heart,
I never thought it could feel so real.
And when you finally said goodbye,
The agony was so clear on my face.
I don't know why it was easy for you,
Your love hidden, without a trace.
I still don't know what i did wrong,
Yet i'd give my life to fix it.
I can't believe you're doing this,
But i guess your path is set.
How could you not walk away,
When i know i caused you pain?
I wish that i could take it back,
I've already shouldered the blame.
Can't you see what you're doing to me,
Tearing my hope away?
There's nothing left in this world for me,
But what more can i say?
So today i stand here fully awake,
Still not able to be myself.
And maybe this is all my fault,
For keeping silent about what i felt.
I stand here with an empty heart,
Waiting only for your approval of me.
With hollow eyes i watch the mirror,
And wonder what it is you see.

So no more hiding all your pain, you deserve a new start. That's why i'm closing myself away, this is a message from your heart.

prettypinkrebel
Member

since 2007-11-07

Posts 104

1 posted 2007-11-12 09:51 PM

hey.. I like this poem it had ALOT of emotion, !! and not to be spiteful or anything it kinda seems a few of the rymes were kinda forced , but over all good job!!
it's going to library :]

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Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural