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Assassin_of_Verse
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that So Cal

0 posted 2007-11-08 02:14 AM



Sorry for my unexcused absence! Things have been very stressful for me lately, and I've been having a hard time dealing with it. I'm also sorry for posting this and not taking the proper time to respond to other posts. I've read some of them, and I'll properly respond tomorrow. Right now, I just need to get this off my chest.


What is this fire in my chest?
Why does it keep me from my rest?
It seems my heart's about to burst,
from this burning, unbidden thirst.

I love you dearly as a friend,
but I think that's drawing to an end.
When you turn and gaze at me,
I wonder just how much you see.

How much longer must I deceive,
until the day that you perceive,
that when my heavy heart first fell,
you were the one I first went to tell.

Though you helped to heal my heart,
'cause of you, it now falls apart.
Though I know you are not to blame,
some things don't quite feel the same.

Could there ever be more than this?
I feel as if my life has gone amiss.

© Copyright 2007 Andrew - All Rights Reserved
moondogz
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since 2007-05-01
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Great White North
1 posted 2007-11-08 06:01 AM


Power emotions..did you fall in love with a friend?
rugged_miss
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since 2007-10-27
Posts 26

2 posted 2007-11-08 12:50 PM


You told her how you feel?


River Of Tears
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since 2006-10-28
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Canada!
3 posted 2007-11-08 04:51 PM


Wow, this hits close to home, though Im not ready to say I 'love' him, maybe just feel different about him.


Good write! I really liked it, it flows together really well, and is really relatable...

Elias Nevermore
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since 2007-11-03
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4 posted 2007-11-08 07:23 PM


great poem and great passion. who is this girl you are talking about

Assassin_of_Verse
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that So Cal
5 posted 2007-11-08 08:20 PM


To Moondogz: Yes, I fell in love with one of my friends, one of my best friends. But I'm not sure if it's real, or if I'm just infatuated with her, 'cause it's happened before.

To rugged_miss: No, I haven't said anything to her, 'cause I know that she doesn't feel the same way, at least not right now. To tell her right now would mess up anything between us.

To Elias Nevermore: She's one of my best friends, you might see me walking around with her.


As assassin shouldn't fall in love.
-The lovestruck assassin

[This message has been edited by Assassin_of_Verse (11-08-2007 09:52 PM).]

rebelangelv
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since 2007-05-28
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usa
6 posted 2007-11-09 12:06 PM


omg wow can sooo relate. my fav from u

If i had to choose between you and breathing, id use my last breath to say "I love you"  

hunnie_girl
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7 posted 2007-11-09 02:59 PM


wow, I can relate too.. I liked this i hope you figure out what to do. Some things are better out in the open. Best of luck
Krysti

surf_painter
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since 2007-04-10
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Canada
8 posted 2007-11-09 03:36 PM


oh wow this is totally amazing and goregeous and sad. just wow it was wow. You did a wonderful job and i can't wait till you post more
Artic Wind
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since 2007-09-16
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Realm of Supernatural
9 posted 2007-11-12 10:15 PM


Enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND

fromme2U
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since 2007-11-09
Posts 257

10 posted 2007-11-13 06:20 PM


I can definitely relate, it takes courage to step up and say "I really love you-more than a friend"
charlie18
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since 2007-11-14
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Washington, United States
11 posted 2007-11-14 12:35 PM


i can totally relate to this poem.
I was in the same situation not to long ago.
great poem. :]

BrittanyJ
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since 2007-06-03
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Come find me?
12 posted 2007-11-14 05:51 PM


I really liked this. It had so much emotion. Thank you for sharing and i wish you the best with your friend.

So no more hiding all your pain, you deserve a new start. That's why i'm closing myself away, this is a message from your heart.

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