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When Will You Come Back Home?
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When Will You Come Back Home? |
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young_blood Senior Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115Indianapolis, IN 
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When Will You Come Back Home? It's been a while, but we're still old friends. With the scars leading the way down faces, past smiles, passed over throats choking on words, to hearts broken by days of silence. It's been a while, but we're still old friends. |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
not one of my favorite but I like this anyway. it was really short and right to the point  Krysti |
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young_blood Senior Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115Indianapolis, IN |
let me encourage you when you read this to go line by line. I focused on form on this and when you realize the certain style, it takes on a different meaning. Thanks for taking time to read this. |
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RevengeIsMine Senior Member
since 2006-07-08
Posts 820Australia |
Hmm.. I actually like it and understood it clearly it took me three reads to understand it but yea it sinks in n leaves a certain grace upon the reader.. loved it.. Well done |
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young_blood Senior Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115Indianapolis, IN |
well thank you. I am glad that you enjoyed it and took the time to read it and allow the subtleties to sink in. |
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Assassin_of_Verse Member
since 2007-10-23
Posts 330that So Cal |
Interesting use of words. Your poem is like a double-edged blade, twice as powerful than the norm. Did you intend for "on words, to hearts broken" to be a pun to "onwards to hearts broken"? As assassin shouldn't fall in love. |
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young_blood Senior Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115Indianapolis, IN |
yes I did! I am glad that you caught that. This poem took on a different kind of life for me. thank you for reading! |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
you are right it did take on a different meaning weh I read it that way.. I kinda interpereted it differently Krysti |
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young_blood Senior Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115Indianapolis, IN |
thanks for taking a second look |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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young_blood Senior Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115Indianapolis, IN |
again thank you for reading |
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