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Teen Poetry #8

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Elias Nevermore
Member

since 2007-11-03

Posts 152

0 posted 2007-11-06 07:07 PM

Silence awaken
Spirit taken
life forsaken
Still awaiting
to see truth
survive the lies
of all mankind
Save yourself
leave them behind
care for nothing
except your own life
Leave love to die
forget your heart
allow nothing inside
Remember your pain
endure the dismay
of losing your soul
by walking away
Tread the path
follow the open road
fall on your back
become a stone
For once you feel
the earth beneath
your body will sink
to the ground underneath
You will lose yourself
and become nothing
as you fade away
to the light approaching
while darkness clouds
your every emotion

surf_painter
Member

since 2007-04-10

Posts 434
Canada

1 posted 2007-11-06 08:18 PM

wow it just flowed so well and the rythm was so cool it was like you could follow it with a drum beat or steps it was awsome

Assassin_of_Verse
Member

since 2007-10-23

Posts 330
that So Cal

2 posted 2007-11-09 09:37 PM

This peom seems to reflect the beat of my life right now. I feel so sad, yet joyful when I read this... I feel as though my muse has cast off its shackles and is preparing me for a radical change.

Thanks Andrew, this has helped me understand some questions in my life.

As assassin shouldn't fall in love.
-The lovestruck assassin

hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

3 posted 2007-11-10 12:44 PM

of losing your soul
by walking away~

Wow, is there any other word for this than that

Krysti

Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural

4 posted 2007-11-12 10:16 PM

Enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND

charlie18
New Member

since 2007-11-14

Posts 8
Washington, United States

5 posted 2007-11-14 12:23 PM

this flowed very nicely.
i enjoyed reading it alot.
good job. :]

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