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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
Don't know why I still write about him seems I just like torturing myself haha oh well... tell me what y'all think of this one(even though all my poems seem to take on the same subject  *sigh*Anywhere But Here It doesn't hurt until I hear his name then I remember that nothings the same dreaming of those nights I fell asleep in his arms and the very first time I fell into his charms All those times I ran my fingers through his hair how many times I wished I was back there I try so hard not to let go of my pride but we could've made it through if he would've tried If you happen to see him when the night draws near what ever you do please don't tell him i'm here All by myself drinking him away don't let him know I've been here all day It would only hurt him to know I turned out like this thinking of him and everything that I miss so if you see him tell him i'm better than you've ever seen don't tell him the truth that it's the worst that i've been tell him i'm shopping, letting go of the past and that I never really thought we'd last tell him i'm in love with someone who's crazy about me don't let him wander to the possibility that I just might be falling apart ever since he broke my heart and the truth is that I'm really not ok I wonder if he knows our six months would've been today So if you happen to see him as the night draws near tell him I'm anywhere, anywhere but here. |
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buttercupbaby Member
since 2006-05-03
Posts 400outside in the rain |
its ever so sad. an i know the feeling. it had good flow.. but some seem sorta forced.. but it might jus be the way i read it :/ anyways, all of your poems are always AMAZING! |
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surf_painter Member
since 2007-04-10
Posts 434Canada |
wow it is sooo sad but so well written and i see why you keep writing about him lately becuase he is still on your mind and from personal experience my poems are my therapy just give it time, and if it helps the poems are wonderfeul and full of emotion |
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Assassin_of_Verse Member
since 2007-10-23
Posts 330that So Cal |
I agree with buttercupbaby, it does seem kind of forced, but when it comes to subjects like love, rejection, and other similar feelings, you have to just let it all out, no matter how forced it may seem. Then you go back and let out the creatvity flow, and it helps you improve as a poet. In other words, great poem! Also, just because you're still writing about this subject, doesn't mean anything bad. It just means you still have something to say. As assassin shouldn't fall in love. |
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RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed Senior Member
since 2007-06-11
Posts 1062In Love <3 |
"so if you see him tell him i'm better than you've ever seen don't tell him the truth that it's the worst that i've been" umm, how sweet and sad, all at the same time. oh hunnie, i've been where you are and it just plain sucks, plain and simple. i'm so sorry that life sucks, hope you can lift up your chin and walk away from this nightmare of life soon. -Kate "I thought I'd just mention in passing . . . I always wanted a Sparkly of my very own." -Jeremy The Crow |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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