Teen Poetry #8 |
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Cold Fronts and Wallets Made of Blood |
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young_blood Senior Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115Indianapolis, IN ![]() |
Cold Fronts and Wallets Made of Blood The sovereign wind is made a liar when it whispers through my hair, telling me thoughts from the fire as the sun stumbles in the sky. It spoke in a tired sort of way asking me to hold its hand, but i knew better than to partake of its whimsical schemes. I traced its thoughts to a quiet wood where warmth could be heard, but in the heart of that place stood a desperate plea to my soul. I understood the unspoken feeling as blood rushed to my head, only waiting for my captive breathing to take its leave from my body. |
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Elias Nevermore Member
since 2007-11-03
Posts 152 |
great poem. nice clean rhyme scheme. I also like the concepts portrayed. good job. Its a shame more people havent read it. |
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RevengeIsMine Senior Member
since 2006-07-08
Posts 820Australia |
This is amazing.. Best work ive seen from you yet.. |
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young_blood Senior Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115Indianapolis, IN |
why thank you both. your reading eyes are greatly appreciated |
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hunnie_girl![]() ![]()
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
Wow I agree with Jess, this was really great. I am glad you decided to come back to Passions. I bet it seems so different now though. Having everyone you used to know gone. well nevertheless good to have you here ![]() Krysti |
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young_blood Senior Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115Indianapolis, IN |
thanks always |
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RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed Senior Member
since 2007-06-11
Posts 1062In Love <3 |
Incredible. woah, you are wuickly becoming my favorite poet ever! I just have to go back and read all of your stuff, it's flippin' Phenomenal (i looked up how to spell that word, lol). wow. -Kate "I thought I'd just mention in passing . . . I always wanted a Sparkly of my very own." -Jeremy The Crow |
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young_blood Senior Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115Indianapolis, IN |
haha, I'm glad to see that reviewing my poem helped you learn to spell a word! ![]() |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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