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justanotherstorm
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since 2007-10-24

Posts 321

0 posted 2007-10-26 12:26 PM

i once loved you
yet you still love me
why dont you just stop
and forget about me
i'll always be here for you
i'll always care
but you need to give up what you want to bare
give me your pain
i'll tear it apart
just stop when you want to give me your heart

this is a poem of another broken heart

hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

1 posted 2007-10-26 01:29 AM

wow I can totally say I know this feeling so well.. I don't know why no one else has posted on this it is really good

yet I always am a sucker for poems that have something to do with broken hearts...
Krysti

latteaddict213

Senior Member

since 2006-02-17

Posts 523
Colorado

2 posted 2007-10-26 07:51 AM

to me it seems a bit mixed messaged.
"i once loved you
yet you still love me
why dont you just stop
and forget about me"
that says im over u y cant u get over me.

"just stop when you want to give me your heart"
and that gives the impression that u want
this person back.

i like the way u ended it though..
cute simple and down to the point

¢¾jess

justanotherstorm
Member

since 2007-10-24

Posts 321

3 posted 2007-10-26 09:31 AM

it is a mixed message actually cuz like i still kinda like the person but i dont want them back cuz im afraid of breaking their heart again
thats why i said
just stop when you want to give me your heart
cuz ill tear that apart too

voice2bheard
Senior Member

since 2007-10-19

Posts 591
New York

4 posted 2007-10-26 06:15 PM

Wow kind of heart breaking, and reminds me of one of my exboyfriends, he hurt me really bad, but he just doesn't know it

justanotherstorm
Member

since 2007-10-24

Posts 321

5 posted 2007-10-26 06:56 PM

the poem reminds u of yo x hmm thats sad
why dont u tell him that youre hurt
well thanx fo your comments

Verg
Member

since 2007-10-25

Posts 52
Colorado

6 posted 2007-10-26 07:33 PM

justanotherstorm how could cutting make a person feel alive

nevermore93
Member

since 2007-10-24

Posts 73

7 posted 2007-10-26 08:17 PM

not bad. needs some work, but pretty good.

btw: pls check out my poem "resurrected' in this forum. id like to hear what you think

deathbilove
New Member

since 2007-10-26

Posts 6

8 posted 2007-10-26 08:44 PM

hey isabel nice poem

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