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Still Scared
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Still Scared |
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Brittany Junior Member
since 2006-09-26
Posts 32Canada |
I’m all grown up now And no longer afraid of the dark I’m not afraid of monsters Or aliens I don’t have nightmares anymore About the bogie man And other dark and scary things Now I’m afraid I’m not good enough And that I won’t make anything of myself I afraid that my dreams won’t come true And that I’ll end up alone I’m unsure of where my life is going And scared that it might not go anywhere I’m worried that I won’t make my parents proud And that I won’t fulfill everyone’s expectations I’m all grown up now And I used to think grown-ups were brave But even though I’m not afraid of the dark I’ve realized that being a grown up Can be just as scary |
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rhia_5779 Senior Member
since 2006-06-09
Posts 1334California |
This was good. I really like the topic. Punctuation though, and in the first stanza, the additions about being scared was kinda redundant to me. |
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tearsoflove13762 Member
since 2004-09-05
Posts 488Texas.. and yes i have an accent |
good first post welcome to pip by the way! great way to introduce yourself |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
WECOME TO PASSIONS  that was a nice first write and acually i liked the beginning how it talked about scary things it made sense to me but... anyways i will look out for more of your poems and again welcome...hunnie* A true friend is someone who reaches for your hand and touches your |
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