Teen Poetry #8 |
Glass (Code Word for Everything) |
RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed Senior Member
since 2007-06-11
Posts 1062In Love <3 |
Glass (Code Word for Everything) Glass, though pretty, breaks so easily A simple action undoes all done If the world were to fall apart If it were to shatter like glass I would want a pretty world So I could appreciate what I lost Glass is clear, in usual reality A simple look displays beyond, or reflects Your eyes reflect my face in their pools Or, sometimes They will display actions beyond now I never tire of these displays Broken glass is sharp, whole glass- smooth Nothing is quiet as violent, or submissive Just like a heart, my heart The more it breaks, the edges cut When whole it is beautiful and meek Two things that I shall never forget "I thought I'd just mention in passing . . . I always wanted a Sparkly of my very own." -Jeremy The Crow |
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Angel101¢¾! Junior Member
since 2007-10-21
Posts 48Lost in pain |
good poem! |
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RevengeIsMine Senior Member
since 2006-07-08
Posts 820Australia |
I think you are one talented writer.. keep writing cause you really do have one hell of a gift.. Stay Safe, Jess |
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RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed Senior Member
since 2007-06-11
Posts 1062In Love <3 |
thanks Jess. -Kate "I thought I'd just mention in passing . . . I always wanted a Sparkly of my very own." -Jeremy The Crow |
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Assassin_of_Verse Member
since 2007-10-23
Posts 330that So Cal |
I enjoyed reading this poem, although I had to read it several times to understand it. I noticed you did not use any punctuation. Was this done purposely? Also, you said in your third stanza that the heart is beautiful and meek when whole. I agree with this, but I'd also like to add that a broken heart is just as beautiful, as well as sad, to see. The more you know, the more you know you don't know. -Socrates |
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RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed Senior Member
since 2007-06-11
Posts 1062In Love <3 |
dear assassin, my personal belief is that a broken heart can make beautiful things, but i don't believe it in itself is a beautiful thing, but that is just the opinion that my broken and repatched heart has. -Kate "I thought I'd just mention in passing . . . I always wanted a Sparkly of my very own." -Jeremy The Crow |
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Derek Junior Member
since 2007-10-20
Posts 38New Hampshire, USA |
very nice poem, keep writing |
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