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Teen Poetry #8

"NO TITLE" PLEASE HELP

[StepheN~]
Junior Member

since 2007-04-19

Posts 15

0 posted 2007-09-11 11:55 PM

My life so quiet i can hear a pen click
My Heart so heavy and crushed into ashes of red brick,
My Body and Mind oozing into the wind,
Im lost with no one- not even a friend,

I am a whole new race,
Wearing the same face,
Living in the same place,
Staring off into space,

I will hold close my greens,
Indulging my mind with crystal THC,
Getting lost in thought and being so free,
Im alone and need someone,
Will it be you who help me?

forever*wishing
Member

since 2006-05-29

Posts 178
where my heart is

1 posted 2007-09-12 12:04 PM

alone in silence?
lost in life?

gosh, im not good with titles...lol =)
but the poem was good...maybe a little forced rhyme and odd rhythym...but it was well written=)

there's more to living than being alive

~Anberlin

RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
Senior Member

since 2007-06-11

Posts 1062
In Love <3

2 posted 2007-09-12 04:52 PM

And No-one Else, hows this for a title. it seems to fit, at least i think so. well gotta post my own, which . . . ironically enough needs a name as well, hope you'll help. lol.

-Red

"I thought I'd just mention in passing . . . I always wanted a Sparkly of my very own." -Jeremy The Crow

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