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Make It Right (revised keep me alive)
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Make It Right (revised keep me alive) |
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Clockwork_Orange Senior Member
since 2007-03-23
Posts 620Space Camp, IN 
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resentment seeps through every breath and the confusions just set in. the worlds spinning way too fast, i think this is the end. and even though it hurts to breath, i will continue to still truge on. because i cant stand to see you smile, and just know that its not mine. the tensions getting higher just like the noose around my neck every single lie you tell takes away the slack and i can tell it in your eyes i can see through all the lies i cant understand why im never right the april rain keeps falling in a pale blue sky drowning all the hopes and fears that once kept me alive and the clock will just keep ticking in a countdown of your life its just like i asked before do you wish you could make it right [This message has been edited by Clockwork_Orange (08-20-2007 04:33 PM).] |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
and even though it hurts to breath, i will continue to still truge on.~ That is good, keep trudging on CO. It is always the best. Another well written poem from you. Krysti ~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~ |
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EmilySian Junior Member
since 2007-08-19
Posts 21England |
I felt very moved by this poem. Made me feel sad! Beautiful imagery. |
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BrittanyJ Member
since 2007-06-03
Posts 461Come find me? |
"resentment seeps through every breath and the confusions just set in. the worlds spinning way too fast, i think this is the end." I really liked the beginning of this one. It was my fav part, but the whole this was amazing  Can't wait for your next one.So no more hiding all your pain, you deserve a new start. That's why i'm closing myself away, this is a message from your heart. |
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