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hunnie_girl

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since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

0 posted 2007-08-18 02:57 AM

That look you give, I know it's time,
you hold out your hand and reach for mine,
gracefully we approach my front door,
I long to kiss you just once more,

I know I shouldn't but I ask you in,
then we start all over again,
glancing at the clock, an hour 'til dawn,
knowing we shouldn't but we're too far gone,

I know I should resist, Put up a fight,
but I can't stop what feels so right,
staring at the clock knowing the end draws near,
you whisper I love you's softly into my ear,

Quietly I sneak you out the back door,
and long to kiss you just once more.

~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~

buttercupbaby
Member

since 2006-05-03

Posts 400
outside in the rain

1 posted 2007-08-18 11:41 AM

woah i cant believe noone has posted on this! >.<

anyway, this was a REALLY good poem!

It was jus flawless.. the flow was perfect! that is really great, it jus went soo smoothly.

very nice. :]

~missy
afraid of my feelings and falling too deep, but i had to let go of the pain let it rain down on me

RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
Senior Member

since 2007-06-11

Posts 1062
In Love <3

2 posted 2007-08-18 01:44 PM

ooooooooooooo hello moderator. so how are you this fine morning? well, afternoon, or evening or dead of night i suppose maybe too. anyways, loved this, library piece.

-Kate

"I thought I'd just mention in passing . . . I always wanted a Sparkly of my very own." -Jeremy The Crow

forever*wishing
Member

since 2006-05-29

Posts 178
where my heart is

3 posted 2007-08-18 02:03 PM

wow...that was realllllllly good!!!! i liked it! =) :: thumbs up! ::
i love how the end tied it up...it was the perfect last line! nice flow...just awesome!

BrittanyJ
Member

since 2007-06-03

Posts 461
Come find me?

4 posted 2007-08-19 04:14 PM

Oh hunnie!!!! This is so amzingly sweet!! I love it, all of it. But the rythm was def my favorite part

So no more hiding all your pain, you deserve a new start. That's why i'm closing myself away, this is a message from your heart.

Sexy_Tator_Tot
Junior Member

since 2007-08-31

Posts 42
Arkansas

5 posted 2007-09-18 11:47 AM

Very good poem. I loved it.

pen&paper
Senior Member

since 2006-06-06

Posts 513

6 posted 2007-09-20 08:37 PM

Oh, hunnie, this was AMAZING!!! Definately my fave by you and that's saying something.
Going in my library, LOVED IT!

pen&paper
Senior Member

since 2006-06-06

Posts 513

7 posted 2007-09-20 08:39 PM

Oh, hunnie, this was AMAZING!!! Definately my fave by you and that's saying something.
Going in my library, LOVED IT!

Abbeon
Member

since 2006-11-30

Posts 228
Curiousity, and wonder

8 posted 2007-09-26 03:00 PM

hunnie wow its been soooooo long since i read your work missing your presence in dark poetry tho hun hope to see your work soon and glad to be able to read your amazing thoughts.

Hugs and squishes-
Abbeon

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