What I wish you said(part 2)

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Teen Poetry #8

What I wish you said(part 2)

hunnie_girl

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since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

0 posted 2007-07-31 11:13 PM

Written in the guys perspective

What I wish you said

I pulled out as a tear escaped your eye,
man it killed me to see you cry,
if only you would have said one word,
but you stood still the pain I couldn't endure,

If only you would have told me the truth,
instead of me having to find the proof,
you could have told me we're gonna have a baby,
didn't you think for one second that maybe,

There was no way i could ever leave,
just seeing you cry makes it hard to breathe,
driving away to blow off some steam,
the car came from nowhere I hold back a scream,
lying awake in a hospital bed,
I can't stop thinking about what I wish you said.

~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~

BrittanyJ
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since 2007-06-03

Posts 461
Come find me?

1 posted 2007-08-01 10:39 AM

Wow hunnie! I liked this one so much! But the ending is so sad...It's amazing

So no more hiding all your pain, you deserve a new start. That's why i'm closing myself away, this is a message from your heart.

surf_painter
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since 2007-04-10

Posts 434
Canada

2 posted 2007-08-02 06:49 PM

i liked this one i think more then the other one

RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
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since 2007-06-11

Posts 1062
In Love <3

3 posted 2007-08-06 11:24 AM

oh, this reminds me that i still haven't gotten around to writting the womans part of dangerous intentions. i hope you read it when i do finally get around to writting it.
and by the way, yours is beautiful. don't you wish men were really like that?

-Red

"I thought I'd just mention in passing . . . I always wanted a Sparkly of my very own." -Jeremy The Crow

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