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Teen Poetry #8

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Clockwork_Orange
Senior Member

since 2007-03-23

Posts 620
Space Camp, IN

0 posted 2007-07-25 12:34 PM

across the plains
and through the tall grass
the wind starts to blow
hard, and fast
the clouds are condensing
this sunshine wont last

the valleys are broad
and the skys are grey
as the king starts to ride
to save his fair maid
the hooves are at gallop
the banner flys high
but the king will fall
and his hopes will die

the mountains are tall
and the oceons are wide
the sun has the strength
to drown time in the tide

hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

1 posted 2007-07-25 12:50 PM

the mountains are tall
and the oceons are wide
the sun has the strength
to drown time in the tide~

Well, Another great poem. I have noticed your strength always seems to be the endings. they have always been my favorite

hunnie.

~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~

WaterFairy103
Member

since 2006-05-31

Posts 196

2 posted 2007-07-25 01:35 AM

Wow, this is really amazing! It completely blew me away, very nice.

I'm the literary equivalent of a Big Mac and Fries.
- Stephen King

BrittanyJ
Member

since 2007-06-03

Posts 461
Come find me?

3 posted 2007-07-25 10:59 AM

Wow!! I really liked this. Nicely written

So no more hiding all your pain, you deserve a new start. That's why i'm closing myself away, this is a message from your heart.

Yogurt
Junior Member

since 2007-07-20

Posts 18
Canada

4 posted 2007-07-25 02:27 PM

i really love your writing, you are very good at writing

A time to kill, and a time to heal;
A time to break down, and a time to build up;
A time to weep, and a time to laugh;
A time to mourn

surf_painter
Member

since 2007-04-10

Posts 434
Canada

5 posted 2007-07-25 03:27 PM

nice job it read so smoothly and it was very well written

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