Teen Poetry #8 |
Live A Lie |
hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
~ ahhh one of my old poems, thought it's now or never so here goes~ Live A Lie It felt wrong saying I love you, it was not the way she felt, she hated the cards fate had dealt, she wishes she could tell him, it's not what he's thought, she can't escape knowing all that he bought, she's ended it before, thats why it feels so wrong, so she'll just pretend her love isn't gone, she knows it will kill him, when she tells him goodbye, but she can't live a lie. ~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~ |
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surf_painter Member
since 2007-04-10
Posts 434Canada |
i liked most of it but some of the rhymning seemed forced but still if this was an old poem it was a good job |
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BrittanyJ Member
since 2007-06-03
Posts 461Come find me? |
I think it could definantly use a little work...but i still absolutly loved it Nice poem hunnie!! Keep 'em comin. So no more hiding all your pain, you deserve a new start. That's why i'm closing myself away, this is a message from your heart. |
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sexykitten15 Junior Member
since 2007-07-22
Posts 34 |
OMG... I loved it. i thought it was EXCELLENT! that relates to me and my Bf. and dk hwo to tell him.. WOW |
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