The Common Cold - pipTalk Forums

How to Join	Member's Area	Private Library	Search	Sanctuary		Login
Main Forums	Discussion	Tech Talk	Mature Content	Archives	A home without a wall, Our haven without ends, A circle we all call Our Family of Friends!

Teen Poetry #8

The Common Cold

RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
Senior Member

since 2007-06-11

Posts 1062
In Love <3

0 posted 2007-07-11 10:30 PM

How could you know,
That I’m not the common girl
What made ya say,
All those words you said to me

How can I tell,
The difference between fake and real
None of this was my idea
It’s killing me more than words could say

I’m too in distress to make good decisions
I baffle myself with the things I say
My nature is to be outspoken
And I do it very well

I lose so many people
With nothing more than words
Sometimes they are theirs,
More often they are mine

And the old wounds still hold their scabs
And sometimes something sticks at them
Pulling them off
And the pain starts anew

But why- she can’t even fathom
Her mind is still too pained
It’s sapping all her energy
Freezing her back in time

"I thought I'd just mention in passing . . . I always wanted a Sparkly of my very own." -Jeremy The Crow

[This message has been edited by RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed (07-12-2007 07:04 PM).]

jayjara
Member

since 2007-05-02

Posts 90
Florida

1 posted 2007-07-11 10:43 PM

I can't decide a title until I know what u r talking about in the second half of the poem, starting with the 4th stanza. Please explain

-J

RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
Senior Member

since 2007-06-11

Posts 1062
In Love <3

2 posted 2007-07-12 07:06 PM

heres your explaination j, i don't know. all i do is write down my feelings in words that my mind creates. you would be able to tell me what is means as well i as i could tell you. most of the stuff i write is like that. i'm sorry to dissapoint though. it kills me like i'm trying to tell my self something in words that i just can't comprehend.

-Red

"I thought I'd just mention in passing . . . I always wanted a Sparkly of my very own." -Jeremy The Crow

Leanne <3
Member

since 2007-08-25

Posts 216
N.S.W, Australia

3 posted 2007-08-25 07:46 AM

i can actually really relate to this atm...nice job!

	⇧ top of page ⇧
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.