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BrittanyJ
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since 2007-06-03

Posts 461
Come find me?

0 posted 2007-07-11 05:57 PM

i'm sorry i should've left sooner
all i've done is caused you pain.
i hear you crying in your room
and i know that i'm to blame.

i'm just so fragile and easily cracked
so unmercifully into pieces i've broken.
but i'm leaving today, it's for the best
now that you've finally spoken.

i wish that i could fix it all
and give you something to keep.
yet all i can do is hurt you worse
and make it hard for you to sleep.

so no more hiding all your pain
you deserve a new start.
that's why i'm closing myself away,
this is a message from your heart.

So no more hiding all your pain, you deserve a new start. That's why i'm closing myself away, this is a message from your heart.

[This message has been edited by BrittanyJ (07-11-2007 08:25 PM).]

WaterFairy103
Member

since 2006-05-31

Posts 196

1 posted 2007-07-11 06:00 PM

This is really good! I didn't expect the end for some reason... Lol Awesome job!!

I'm the literary equivalent of a Big Mac and Fries.
- Stephen King

RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
Senior Member

since 2007-06-11

Posts 1062
In Love <3

2 posted 2007-07-11 06:04 PM

wow! i loved it! this is the cutest (i know it's not supposed to be) but it is the cutest thing i've ever read.

-Red

"I thought I'd just mention in passing . . . I always wanted a Sparkly of my very own." -Jeremy The Crow

hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

3 posted 2007-07-12 12:56 PM

wow this was really good...
hunnie.

~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~

tearsoflove13762
Member

since 2004-09-05

Posts 488
Texas.. and yes i have an accent

4 posted 2007-07-12 01:53 AM

I like the title and how you used it in the last line and it was different because usually it is something like "A message from MY heart" but this poem is selfless and about someone else's feelings and i love it

-Laura

BrittanyJ
Member

since 2007-06-03

Posts 461
Come find me?

5 posted 2007-07-12 12:30 PM

I really wanted it to seem like when you read it, it was YOUR heart talking to YOU. I thought about ending it differently, but this ending worked better. Thanks for all the replys and kind words

So no more hiding all your pain, you deserve a new start. That's why i'm closing myself away, this is a message from your heart.

RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
Senior Member

since 2007-06-11

Posts 1062
In Love <3

6 posted 2007-07-16 07:02 PM

i had to bring it up again (the poem i mean) b/c i just love it. i think it's the best i've ever read. i wish i had the imagination to write something of this magnitude. i love it alot. i would acually pay to read this if i had to.

-Red

"I thought I'd just mention in passing . . . I always wanted a Sparkly of my very own." -Jeremy The Crow

RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
Senior Member

since 2007-06-11

Posts 1062
In Love <3

7 posted 2008-01-27 07:46 PM

Alright, me again! I just have to tell you that this is so great I read it many times over again and again, so I wanted to share it with one of my friends and was wondering if that was okay?

-Kate

and in the daylight i miss the nightmare- but deathly fear it in the dark of night

BrittanyJ
Member

since 2007-06-03

Posts 461
Come find me?

8 posted 2008-06-30 02:48 PM

Yea of course you can show it to a friend.
Sorry i haven't been on in forever

So no more hiding all your pain, you deserve a new start. That's why i'm closing myself away, this is a message from your heart.

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