Tears of Rage(working title)

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Tears of Rage(working title)

Kaos
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since 2001-08-02

Posts 317
between space and time

0 posted 2006-09-01 02:00 PM

Cloud cover on my heart      again
  bringing hurricane winds to my path
       and lost     again
A single tear streaks down my complection
marring the smile that lived only a moment ago
   unsure if you're even worthy of it
the doorway to my heart slams shut again
  as thunder roars on the horizon
and lightining crashes to the ground
   as tears of rage flow like a monsoon
and homicidal emotions let loose to the music
  watching the drops explode on the pavement
    mixing with the endless rain inside my head
As i open my eyes      i see infinite darkness
     And i thought it was only in my head....

" Everytime he held you close, yea were you thinking of me..." Stab My Back-All American Rejects

*Alli4000*

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since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

1 posted 2006-09-01 09:47 PM

Wow, I really enjoyed this! It was so descriptive and flowed great.

Keep posting!

~Alli~

stargal
Senior Member

since 2006-03-06

Posts 1352
OR USA

2 posted 2006-09-03 12:53 PM

Hey Kaos,

Dunno if anyone has ever told you this before but your stuff is way deep! lolz
Which, I like it, it makes you think about what is being said, instead of just reading and forgetting, now you got to decipher

This poem is no exception; makes you think, I loved it. Plus the conflicting emotions in this make a very interest poem to read…

Thanks for sharing this piece! It was something I’m glad I didn’t miss out on reading

"I pray thee, O God, that I
may be beautiful within."
–Socrates
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Shaddow1
Junior Member

since 2006-09-04

Posts 41
Kingman Az, USA

3 posted 2006-09-04 03:09 PM

Wow very nicely written and yes I agree your poetry is very deep. I have only read 2 of your work's, but do you always associate your emotion's with such distructive weather? I like it though, weather is a very powerful force of nature. You comparing your emotion's to it only intensifies the poem projection of feeling's.

(I apologize for being such a bad speller)

Love is like a Rose; it always dies - Britney Miller

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