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Anniepimm
Senior Member

since 2008-12-26

Posts 550
England

0 posted 2009-01-02 05:15 AM

My Dear Children

Just thought i would write a letter
To tell you how i feel
I know! you think me feeble
But that's just part of my appeal,

I know that i haven't been the best parent
And sometimes i can be a bit of a pain!
But given my whole life over
A would give birth to you all over again,

Being a mum isn't easy!
There are lots that i have to learn
But to get the respect you need from me
Sadly you have to earn,

So when i complain that you neglect me
And i am in need of attention from you
Just remember the time i have unconditionally given
And all the things that i did for you,
If in your busy, and fast paced lives
Now and again you think of the women behind the smile
Just know that i still love you
And please come visit me for a while,

Love you my children
Your Mum!

Annie
11-11-2008

steavenr
Member Elite

since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

1 posted 2009-01-02 02:47 PM

yes... but that second stanza:

"I know that i haven't been the best parent
And sometimes i can be a bit of a pain!
But given my whole life over
A would give birth to you all over again,"

...says it all...nice write

Anniepimm
Senior Member

since 2008-12-26

Posts 550
England

2 posted 2009-01-03 01:55 AM

Thank you for your reply

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

3 posted 2009-01-05 05:11 PM

May the appreciation and attention increase...James

Anniepimm
Senior Member

since 2008-12-26

Posts 550
England

4 posted 2009-01-05 05:17 PM

Thank you i hope they do to...

Robert E. Jordan
Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-25

Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

5 posted 2009-01-06 11:02 AM

Yo Anniepimm,

Always capitalize your first person singular personal pronoun "I".

That's one of the first rules for adequate writing. Never diminish yourself to small letters.

Bobby

nourzihane
Member

since 2008-07-10

Posts 254
Algeria

6 posted 2009-01-06 11:18 AM

Dear friend Anniepimm

children are really blessing from god
thank you so much my friend
wish you the best

my kisses
Nourzihane

Anniepimm
Senior Member

since 2008-12-26

Posts 550
England

7 posted 2009-01-06 11:33 AM

Thank you Bobby I will remember to do that,
I appreciate the advise

And thank you Nourzihane i am glad you liked the poem

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