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Not sure on a name yet, any suggestions?
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PrestonThePoet Member
since 2007-11-07
Posts 87 |
Why are some things so obvious, They’re invisible. You know exactly what you’re doing. Only you don’t stop yourself. Things are easily broken, By stupidity. Without realizing what you’ve broken. While your stomping it into on the floor. No matter how much glue you use, It’s never the same. Every time you lift your foot, You see shards of what could have been. Broken pasts, Shattered by carelessness. |
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Blood.Wolf Member
since 2009-02-09
Posts 54GA, USA |
There're really no words for this. I agree so much with its message. Sorry about not having any title suggestions... |
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turtle Senior Member
since 2009-01-23
Posts 548Harbor |
The object of this poem is "Out Of Control" Turtle |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Hi, Preston! I like turtle's suggestion for a title "Out of Control". Whenever I've lost my grip, so to speak, the results were so disastrous for me, that I now pull in the reins, and think before I act ~ or react.   EA |
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WTBAKELAR
since 2008-09-09
Posts 1089Utah, USA |
CONNUNDRUMS of CIRCUMSTANCE or, How about: YADDA, YADDA, BLAH-BLAH-BLAH. Enjoyed, WT. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Broken Mirrors. At least that was the imagery I received. Enjoyed, thank you! |
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shelerella75 Member
since 2009-01-30
Posts 58 |
ooh.. I kinda like sunshine's suggestion... though I think I'd invert the wording as "mirrors broken" |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...how about "Seeds of Carelessness."...or "Fruits of Carelessness."...James |
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gilead Senior Member
since 2008-03-10
Posts 1067nevada, USA |
How about: "Untitled Meditations"? It's kind of tricky, I think. art |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
"shards of what could have been" ...really nice line, who knows, maybe even a title in there, ya think? |
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Raindance Member
since 2009-02-07
Posts 120West Coast |
I think your poem is about lessons; that would make a good title. I can relate...painfully good write. |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo PrestonThePoet, It's probably not a good idea to ask people to give a name to your poem. That's all I'll bother saying on the matter. Bobby |
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gilead Senior Member
since 2008-03-10
Posts 1067nevada, USA |
Ah, Bobby, I think it's more a matter of having a little fun thinking about it, rather than seriously suggesting a title.  But your point is well taken.art |
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gilead Senior Member
since 2008-03-10
Posts 1067nevada, USA |
I'm having a problem with my default icon and font settings holding. Anybody with the same problem? Any suggestions? art |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Art, Go into the Member's Area/Help and click on your profile. From there, you can stabilize your icon. Let me know if you have any questions.  |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
I like all the suggestions that you have been given. I agree with Steaven that the following could provide an apt title. "shards of what could have been". Might I suggest ~ "Shards" "What Could Have Been" "Broken" "Shattered" Linda |
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