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Tim
Senior Member

since 1999-06-08

Posts 1794

0 posted 2009-01-01 01:02 PM

I hear a whisper calling,
From where I do not know,
As light of day is falling,
In the calm of dusk's bestow.

Perhaps a wind blows through the trees,
With pine cones dancing in the breeze,
Or perchance a speckled fawn,
Calls out to seek a doe now gone,

I hear a whisper calling,
'Tis not a deer nor wind,
A gentle voice enthralling,
What message does she send?

To her I shout, “Please let me see,”
So I might view, whom you might be.”
She does not show herself to me,
As darkness falls upon the lea.

I hear not a whisper calling,
She is gone, I know not why,
No longer hear her voice enthralling,
"Where have you gone, to her I cry."

Comes no reply in day's decline,
Comes no reply from Vespertine.

[This message has been edited by Tim (01-01-2009 03:58 PM).]

Arius Miura de Galdri
Member

since 2007-07-04

Posts 90
Michigan, USA

1 posted 2009-01-01 01:05 PM

Wow, this was really good. I loved the visuals it brought to mind and, even though it seemed to have some issues with rhythm to me, I thought it was fantastic!

AMdG

"My candle burns at both ends; it will not last the night; but ah, my foes, and oh, my friends--it gives a lovely light!" -Edna St. Vincent Millay

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

2 posted 2009-01-01 01:51 PM

Time out suits you

This reminds me of my "instances" where I am so sure that I hear my friend Willow, when walking through the woods, but when I turn, she is gone. Wishful thinking I guess Tim. Beautiful poem, and Happy New Year to you and your Rose.

Anniepimm
Senior Member

since 2008-12-26

Posts 550
England

3 posted 2009-01-01 04:13 PM

Tim. This is Beautiful poem,
Reminds me of that bit when Bambi lost his mum to the hunters
Excellent poem...

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

4 posted 2009-01-01 05:49 PM

Good one, Tim.
Ida

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

5 posted 2009-01-01 09:09 PM

Tim,

You write a hauntinly beautiful tale. Thank you for sharing.

Happy New Year.
Alison

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