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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. 
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blazing hot heart-shaped-locket butterflies are burning big holes in each of my big lungs and underneath my sternum. black powder smiles and laughs are caressing my thoughts and making me remember you the way you used to be. _____________________________________________ So this is what it's like to laughsmilecrydie. Some people fall in love and touch the sky, some people fall in love and find quicksand. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
viking_metal - lot's of different emotions to deal with for sure... BC |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. |
BC, there are many. And please suh, call me Paul.  -P Some people fall in love and touch the sky, some people fall in love and find quicksand. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
I think this is very good, dear Paul! Powerful emotions. Love and joy. Margherita |
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Anniepimm Senior Member
since 2008-12-26
Posts 550England |
Beautifully imaged and a sad moving write Depicting the dangers of smoking Thanks for sharing. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
As for your own "Face", your photo is very dark on my monitor so I lightened it up and your handsome face popped out at me!  Forgive me if I have missed the mark on your poem, but is it about quitting smoking? Whatever your intent was, you certainly had some power-packing images in your poem! May your new year be a glorious one!   EA |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. |
Margo rito- Thank you sweetheart, you're a real pal! Annie- It's funny you say that, because it wasn't written about smoking at all, though now reading it I can COMPLETELY see what you mean! Thank you very much darlin'. Earth angel, earth angel, one I adore- No! But I can completely see how one would get that from the poem! As usual, It's about a girl that isn't worth the time. And I don't know if I'd say handsome, but thanks very much ma'am. Some people fall in love and touch the sky, some people fall in love and find quicksand. |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo Paul, One good memory is worth at least three bad ones. Nice work on this poem. Bobby |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. |
Thanks Bobbus Maximus. You the man. -P Some people fall in love and touch the sky, some people fall in love and find quicksand. |
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Callista Member
since 2008-10-05
Posts 63USA |
Great description of that burny choky feeling when painful emotions well up bigger than their vessel. The last line is really good. "The Moving Finger writes, and, having writ, |
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