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a postcard from Easton
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a postcard from Easton |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Who am I ? asks the poet, I am what I see when I see it, right now I am a postcard from 1935, I am dark roofs that mocks the rain, I am a sunny façade with wrinkles of silence, I am a train that embarks a knowing man, I am a large tree that plunges in a glazed river, I am lights that splash on shy gardens, I am hidden memories of people who lived here, I am a poscard from Easton, Pennsylvania, I am what I see when I see it. |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Yann, this is a masterpiece! I think it is my favourite of all of your poems that I have read! Magnificent! Owl |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo Yann, I would try and get rid of all the first person singular pronouns. You might think of putting it in the third person. That would work well. Bobby |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Yann, I like the power of "I" - and I once was in Easton and loved it. Thank you for bringing back some memories of good times. Alison |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
I, too, like the "I". The whole meaning of the poem would change if you replaced it with the third person. Owl |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
It's a fine expression the way it is and the presentation of context is very appealing. I enjoyed the read very much. Eric |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo, Excuse me for living. Over use of "I" is way pretentious. It's just not done. Needless to say, I don't give a rat's behind what you write. Bobby |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
As far as I am concerned you are excused, Bobby. |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
"I" think this is one of your best, yann. Ida |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
thank you Owl, I'm glad you appreciate the poem, I guess I was lucky on this one, I found a postcard on the exhibitions of the metropolitan museum.... have a nice day yann |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Hi Bobby I understand what you mean and I'm concsious that the use of I could be strange, however the poem is a translation and I used "Je" in the french version and it fits well my thoughts....Thank you for the acurate comment. yann |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Thank you Alison for passing and leaving a kind comment. regards yann |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Thank you Ethome, I'm honored by your comment that brings me some pride. have a nice day yann |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Thank you Ida for the kind comment. have a nice day yann |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Yes, dear Yann, this is definitely a keeper. You touch upon the quantic theory here with your affirmations. Simply wonderful. J'adore vraiment ce que tu as exprimé ici. Love, Margherita  |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
I enjoyed this, Yann. Some poems just have to be written in the "I" and this is one such write. Je pense que vous ecrit une belle poem. (Sorry if my French is rough, I haven't had much opportunity to read or speak it since the early 70's.) |
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sarah 45 Member
since 2008-12-19
Posts 54 |
4geting all about what they said about the "I", I think it's perfect as in really, really 1 of ur greatest, just loved it. T.C |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Yann, this is a  , to be sure! I enjoy reading poems about poets and their writing of poetry!  "I am what I see when I see it." I love that line! Love & Poet Light, Linda  |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Chére margherita, ce que tu duis est si gentil, je te remercie du fond du ceur, ton commentaire m'a touché. merci yann |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Thank you Midnitsun, I enjoyed your comment and always I'm marvelled by american speaking or writing french, I would like so much to express myself correctly in the langauge of Shakespeare... thanks for the very kind comment. yann |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Thanks Sarah for the supportive comment, your are very welcomed. have a nice day yann |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Dear Linda, you made a gift with your comment, I'm honored and warmly thank you. hugs yann |
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