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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast 
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I listened to the rain for hours wondering if you were also and if that last kiss was one too many to make you ever want another of maybe many several over time the gentleman of me was nervous about saying goodbye with just glances and giving you room to step outside of the circle of our palms but then I reloved your freedom and how you were just as secret then the very first time touching when you didn't know you wore my eyes of the boy man of my thinking thinking you were better being forbidden we spoke of funny umbrellas spinning and it was the reason for my touch seeing how it seemed to fly away so soon like a butterfly escaping her hands and I had to know if you were real first before I just listened to the rain again _________________ daark (circle of palms) |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ok, you got both sighs and chills from this one...   Lovely, D. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
DS...The rain sang to me all night long, in between dreams. It was lovely as is your poem. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms sun, thanks lady friend _______________ ms martie, thank you little neighbor, yes it did play loudly didn't it. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Wonderful deep emotions captured in fine poetic fashion. Superb writing! Eric |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Listening to the rain, in stillness of mind, has inspired you to write a masterpiece once again, dear D.. With each drop of rain echoing within your mind new words start to dance Love, Margherita  "Love is the One who masters all things; |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
eric...humble thanks sir _____________ ms mar, thanks special lady for the touch |
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Dark Star Member
since 2008-02-20
Posts 392Lost in your eyes |
nice |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
thanx |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo Dark Stranger, There's very good thinking behind this poem. I like it. Bobby |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
How many ways can I say "Beautiful"? The rain sounds incredible when you bring it to a poem. A |
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Blood.Wolf Member
since 2009-02-09
Posts 54GA, USA |
You managed to make perhaps the most mundane into the most beautiful. 'grats! |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
The rain is a soothing, calming voice that lulls me into a feeling of peace D. SIGH Ya done good with this one DarkDaddy. Hugs n luv, ~D |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
*sigh* from down under too.. lovely writing Mr Daark.. Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight......... |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
bobbyJ..thanks amigo _________________ ms ali-san, thank you babe for the eyes _______________ blood.W thank you for the read and comment _______________ ms gs, thank you Donna __________________ ms R&B, thanks lady friend from undertown |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
your palms are circling my umbreallas and im full of dark rain waiting for you to erupt me |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Wow, this is soooo good, DS. I was born on a rainy, and have always loved the rain. But your poem was a wonderful peak into the most tender side of caring, of accepting the space and freedom of someone who apparently stole both eyes and heart. Betcha she had long legs. I'll be keeping this one, mon ami. Kacy, |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms inky..thanks lady friend.. ____________ ms midnite..she does have long legs..thanks lady for the touch and smile |
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Indigo Senior Member
since 2001-05-17
Posts 602 |
it was the boy man all tattoed and whiskey voiced that brought the soft rain. Indigo |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
I listen to the rain she is always there |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms indi..yes the man boy always with storms in his eyes and she only danced his fences ____________ bro Krawdad..thanks amigo |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
You just keep getting better and better. *S* I love this tender beauty! |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms suther..thanks lady!! you bless me with those glances |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
"if that last kiss was one too many to make you ever want another of maybe many several over time" I love the dilemma that this presents...as captivating as the rest of the write...very enjoyable read |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
thanks guy!! I always appreciate your views |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
On a re-read after a night ago of hailrains and hailmarys and subsequent dreams this became even more a milestone in your roadways. Yes, worthy of more than two rereads or retreads whichever way you travel. Yes? |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms sun...you bring a morning to each of my moments...thank you |
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