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King Pinewood
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King Pinewood |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada 
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From where I stand, I see the thaw and on the frozen floor the sun upon the glowing crust is glistening wet and pure. Upon the surface of rolling hills the glossy snowdrifts ride; there is no place or living thrill like greenwoods sprouting eyes. A mild scent is on the air; I lift my head and breathe out of the sky I seem to hear a calling on the breeze. The sound of God and life and wild the sound of earth that grows out of the wind that whispers by the sound of trees that moan. I know now why it is I care; I bend my head and pray; I cannot drive them from my heart these teardrops that I make. . . . . Then I wonder about clear cutting forests? About how much nature they destroy!! King pinewood brimmed a rocky crag no finer crown against the sky, the sun that lit the weathered jag pronounced his lofty size. Handsome and tall he stood grand ruler of the slope. A sovereign lofty scented wood of anchient kindred pulp. The clouds rolled in the wind did blow no sign of warming cheer. King Pinewood's roots upon the stone held firm and never veered. His blessed offshoots drooped with snow and ice clung to his roots. Proud monarch maintained his pose never failing to salute. Then one solemn frozen day upon his trunk a shadow grew a motored spinning toothy blade rose up to run him through. With coarse, snapping, grateing sounds proud sultan down he came. His throne usurped he smashed the ground his breaking cries in vain. With stately mast and branches strewn down over pithy rocks Old King Pinewood's time came due to serve a lesser god. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Oh, gosh, dear Eric, you made me shiver to the bones with this impressively intense and heartwrenching write! I do so know what you felt! They have done this to my favorite pine tree in front of my living room, last year. I almost fainted when I realized ... This is an awesome write. Thank you! Love, Margherita |
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Marc-Andre Senior Member
since 2008-12-07
Posts 501 |
Eric, this is gorgeous, daunting, so vivid that a sparkling clear image filled my mind without the least effort. Truly impressive. Mark |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo Eric, This is very fine work. Are you a lumberjack or what? It takes me back to my chainsaw days in West Virginia. Bobby |
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WTBAKELAR
since 2008-09-09
Posts 1089Utah, USA |
I can hear your tears. WOW, Wonderful poem, very powerful, . . . . . . "WOW" Good job. WT. |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
This makes me so sad but it is a fantastic write, Maybe your best. Ida |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
 Eric, as a tree-lover, this powerful and very well-written poem, impacted me deeply and on different levels. Love & Tree Light, Linda  |
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LindsayP Member Elite
since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410Australia, Victoria |
Eric I too think that is one of your best, A deep thoughtful poem that I thoroughly enjoyed, well done my friend. Lindsay |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
powerfully impressive...the ending (especially) was a fine piece of drama...very nicely done |
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gilead Senior Member
since 2008-03-10
Posts 1067nevada, USA |
A powerful write, Eric. The lesser god too often fails to think of the fact that he is, indeed, a lesser god who shall fall like the princes! I'm working my way toward getting to read and know the fine poets here. Best wishes, art |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
*shivers* dang, you are good Eric |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
ethome - one of your best writes. Found these words amazing and well put together... BC |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Eric...Your imagery and intense feeling captured me. |
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amusemi Senior Member
since 2001-12-08
Posts 1262A State of Disarray |
Eric...this is so vivid and real. Absolutely beautifully written. |
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Boshii2 Member
since 2009-02-01
Posts 146 |
I am still getting over the "lonely crunch of the toast" and now you have the sultan being " run through"...just wonderful stuff. Boshii2 |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Your poem truly touched me. *S* [This message has been edited by Sunshine (02-09-2009 10:50 AM).] |
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ken206573 Member
since 2008-10-14
Posts 487 |
Hearing this poem made me happy. I love trees and nature itself. After school I am always looking at the trees and how beautiful they are standing beyond time itself. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Hi Margherita Sorry to hear about your tree but glad I was able to touch you with this piece. Thanks for the visit. Marc I appreciate the kind thoughts and the sparkling clear comment. Be reading you soon. Bobby LOL! No I'm no lumberjack but I am a nature lover. I also realize that some of these trees have to be cut down but wish it was done responsibly. Thanks again for the visit. WT Thanks for the visit and I am so glad you could hear those are truly special times. I appreciate the kind comments. Ida Don't know whether it's my best or not but I sure enjoyed writing it and enjoyed your visit and read just as much. Linda So happy I could reach your thoughts on different levels. Thanks for the kind reply. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Lindsay Glad you could stop and read this piece. It might be one of my best, I don't know but it affected me this way at the time of writing. Thanks for those thoughts. Steavan Thanks for the drama comment and am happy you appreciated that ending. Appreciate your visit. gilead Thanks for those words and the passion of your reply. There are many many fine poets here and you will enjoy reading them and getting to know how special they truly are. passing If I could give you the good shivers like that then I am happy you appreciated it that way. Thank you so much for the kind writer's comment. Bill It might be one of my best I don't know but I'm glad you found this touching that way. Martie Dear sweet flower girl. If I captured you with this then I am very pleased and hope to read your qwords soon. |
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