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Open Poetry #44

A Beautiful Place.

Anniepimm
Senior Member

since 2008-12-26

Posts 550
England

0 posted 2009-01-31 05:33 AM

A Beautiful Place.

There is a butterfly fluttering quite near
And a girl with long blond flowing hair
She stops and smiles in my direction
She looks like glass looking in a reflection,

There are fields of flowers everywhere
They smell so sweet their perfume fills the air
I walk through them like floating along
I can hear the birds sing there soothing song,

I feel so peaceful like I wanted to stay
The grass beside me begins to sway
As I awake I feel so calm and serene
Its the most beautiful place I have ever been,

I rise to go and look back in my direction
There I am I can see my reflection,
A hand reaches out and I take hold,
Come on said a voice it's time to go home,

Annie, 13-7-2008

Marc-Andre
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since 2008-12-07

Posts 501

1 posted 2009-01-31 10:18 AM

I especially enjoyed the imagery in the first stanza. The second wasn't bad either, but I would have liked more detail, perhaps as simple as knowing what flowers they are, so I can smell their perfume too

Mark

Anniepimm
Senior Member

since 2008-12-26

Posts 550
England

2 posted 2009-01-31 12:59 PM

Thank you for the reply
I shall bare that in mind next time
I write about flowers..

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

3 posted 2009-02-02 01:07 PM

Indeed this is a beautiful place, reading it is like being there too.

Lovely.

Love,
Margherita

Anniepimm
Senior Member

since 2008-12-26

Posts 550
England

4 posted 2009-02-02 07:51 PM

Thank you Margherita

nourzihane
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since 2008-07-10

Posts 254
Algeria

5 posted 2009-02-03 12:01 PM

how beaytiful to begins the person his evening with poquet of feelings
thank you my dear ennie

love
Nourzihane

Anniepimm
Senior Member

since 2008-12-26

Posts 550
England

6 posted 2009-02-03 12:54 PM

Thank you for reading my poem

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

7 posted 2009-02-04 05:55 PM

A pleasure to read...James

Anniepimm
Senior Member

since 2008-12-26

Posts 550
England

8 posted 2009-02-04 06:36 PM

Awww James thank you very much that's lovely

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